Jul 31, 2021
Let me start with some criticism. The beginning 'Ship of Theseus' question doesn't work too well with me, especially where you suggest that a different heart will make you question your identity a lot. Frankly, that doesn't seem that weird since I rarely see or feel my heart. Personally, I immediately thought of the brain because, well, that's where my thoughts come from. I also think a different face would be freaky.
Also, your descriptions are very vivid, but I sometimes can't understand exactly what's going on. I thought that the MC was running away initially, but after rereading it, it seems that she tripped and fell.
But as I mentioned, your descriptions are very vivid and usually easy to understand.