Jul 21, 2021
Hmm interesting, I feel like some of the dialogue was a bit strange sounding in the middle but the benefit of having a dialogue heavy chapter is that we really get a feel for the characters, only other thing I’d say is that you need something out of the ordinary to happen in chapter 1, it doesn’t need to be something big but if something at least semi-hinting at bigger things to come in future chapters isn’t included, most people will be hesitant to continue reading going forward, otherwise a very quality chapter and I’ll most likely keep reading