Jul 06, 2022
Really intriguing synopsis. A couple of thoughts as I read through your first chapter:
1) does the painting “the lady of despair” actually exist? Either way loved it’s description
2) I might be wrong since I’m not from Japan, but doesn’t the 2nd semester of college start in October, not after winter break as it’s stated in your novel?
3) Overall the story feels very descriptive, almost like there’s a narrator reciting your story. It would help if there was more dialogue, and more interactions between characters that occur in the moment.
Overall I’m intrigued by where the story goes, keep it up! (Ps check out my romcom story if you get a chance!)