Aug 19, 2021
I like that the chapter are not too long, but at this point it feels like it is all too rushed.
First of all, as many have already pointed out, a little but more of punctuation could help taking a break and follow the story calmly. Secondly, the time leap was too sudden. And thirdly, I think a little bit of description of the characters, environment and actions would give the story more personality. In the long run, people apreciate the stories by these little details. And when they fall in love with a character, that's when you ca get to create emotional and touching stories.
Anyway I really like the concept so I'm looking forward to future developments 💫🌷😸