Dec 12, 2025
To:Moon
Thank you so, so much for reading all the way through and leaving so many wonderful comments! I'm really grateful for that. 
I'm glad the descriptions in the first few chapters stayed with you. I've struggled with white room syndrome for a long time, so seeing that I've improved there makes me happy.
But, on the other hand, I think this work shows one of my biggest weaknesses still (which I've had pointed out a few times by the lovely people here) in that I rush my stories at the end. It's something I'm aware of but still struggle with, which is super frustrating! And I think it shows not only in the plot, but the prose as well. This story very much has some cool aspects, but they all stay in "potential" territory instead of me actually fleshing them out :(
The sentence constructs you pointed out will go right into my "search for and delete" collection. While reading your comment, some sentences immediately sprung to mind, but I really wasn't aware it was that grating. So thank you so much for pointing that out!
For now, I hope focusing on smaller, tighter works in novella length will hopefully play into my strengths and let me polish my stories more while not making me impatient. ( I wish I could write endless web novels, but I'm not that type of writer, unfortunately...) I love the Honeyfeed contests, they always give me a big source of energy and inspiration, but I can't make any promises for the ongoing one :) Still, I hope that if you choose to read my next work (whatever it will be) that I'll be able to entertain and show some improvements.
