Jun 12, 2022
You story telling skills are good, maybe even better than mine, but you aren’t applying any format to it, this makes it harder to read. This is just my opinion, I think, You should use paragraph more and maybe bold or italics to give more info without telling much. Correlation is hard sometimes and learned through hours of writing, I learnt that after spending more than 3 days on a single chapter, so, don’t worry too much about that one.