Aug 27, 2022
Now that I've read the first two chapters I want to give my opinion and a friendly critique. I hope you don't take them personally, I know it probably gets better as it goes, but I think the first impression is very important.
1. There's no character description, the reader couldn't imagine the story if he doesn't know how the characters look.
2. It's a little rushed, the story happens way too quickly, some people may like this though.
3. Everyone just likes Sawano because he is the main character and he defeated the girl, he didn't do anything to earn their respect.
4. And I just wanna point out the grammar, I know you warned us about them.
However, the story looks good and long, which is important. Keep up the good work, I'm sorry if I offended you!
