Aug 15, 2023
You should make your writing more concise and make your story more vague as it is a detective genre, also do follow minatika's advice for the example.
don't hit the paragraphs from the start to finish without spaces, also PI is private investigator. Read good mystery novels to get a sense on your screen play format, I'd recommend phillip marlowe stuff cos I love it. Also there are some spelling errors, feel free to hit me up.
feel free to check my work https://www.honeyfeed.fm/novels/12538
best of luck
