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lolitroy

I usually read back as a courtesy but if you're gonna read JUST so I return the favor, heed my warning: I won't

apparently my writing style is too avant-garde for the weebs or some shit but if you ask me that's just a polite way to tell me I have terminal skill issue

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aaa

Jul 21, 2023

she must really know her son if she can infer that nothing will happen even if he shares a room with a girl his age

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My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:6

Jul 21, 2023

okay but why is the dialogue bold
I read this other webnovel years ago where one character's dialogue was always highlighted, because he claimed to be an alien and it was implied he talked in a very magnanimous way, so it worked, and it was pretty funny. I thought it'd be something like that here with his mom's dialogue being highlighted instead, but it seems to happen to everyone? I don't get it.

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My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:5

Jul 21, 2023

why is the mom's dialogue bold tho

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My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:3

Jul 21, 2023

not gonna lie, I feel like you could've condensed the first three chapters into one, ended in the same place, and achieved the same things :'P

again, I must reinstate that I did not wake up today expecting to read about middle schoolers discussing about nutjuice

P.S. I WISH LISA HAD A RATE-UP. SERIOUSLY, MINE IS ONLY C1 AND SHE WAS ONE OF THE FIRST UNITS I BUILD YEARS AGO LIKE COME ONN

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My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:2

Jul 21, 2023

Ykno, I think you kind of nailed it when it comes to awkward 13 year old boy thoughts. To an uncomfortable degree >-> (not criticism, I just did not wake up today expecting to read about a middle schooler's wet boxers)

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My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:1

Jul 21, 2023

stuttering 101
Try reading it aloud. How nature does it sound? Does t-t-t-this sound less forced than something with a c-consonant with which you're not closing your m-m-m-mouth?

Anyway, after the long, angsty separation scene, it's time to see them reunite (?).

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My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:0

Jul 21, 2023

it's cool that there movies like these still get made, where it doesn't feel like the director thinks you're so stupid and devoid of introspection that their work will bore you without explosions every 5 seconds
having said that, while I get the intention behind the scene, it feels pretty on the nose, as though you'd seen or felt the same thing before and wanted to talk about it yet forgot to filter it through a 'literary' lens so to say, which is kind of ironic given the context
even though there is an attempt to show, a lot of the time, it ends up being telling. she 'felt like' this and that. maybe obviating 'felt' could help a bit more. I don't remember the term, but somebody seeing/hearing/feeling often ends up distancing rather than the alternative. as in 'she saw something beautiful' vs. 'she saw something that (insert body language response here).
Alternatively it could be that the way she interprets things is just simple, which is also fine, but it doesn't seem like you were going for that based on the language employed and intent I thought I perceived. Still, I digress. It's not bad by any means, just, ykno :P

Celluloid Cover Image

Celluloid: The Magic beneath us

Chapter:5

Jul 21, 2023

omg... ?¡?¡?¡¡.... is that a.... motherfucking grandma maid reference!?!?!?!?!?¡¡¡!¡!¡¡!¡¡!¡!¡¡!¡1‼1cm1w1‼1☺1o‼⌂o

Grace Dances Upon the Clouds

Chapter:26

Jul 21, 2023

griffithn't

Eryn and Claude

Atk 0 Crit All ~My attack stat is negligible, so I can't help but rely on critical hits to succeed!~

Chapter:287

Jul 21, 2023

man, poor alice
I thought she'd be madder about the konya situation but apparently not (?)
it sucks that she's probably going to distance herself from daisuke and probably kiyoshi now ;-; and with the way things go in these stories she might grow resentful of konya and kiyoshi
but like she's also a really nice person so idk
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Cursed Lines

Chapter:18

Jul 21, 2023

babey

Cursed Lines

Chapter:17

Jul 20, 2023

he washed that man's hair for 8 hours wtf

btw, to anyone else reading this: play a salad fingers video in the background. you're welcome.

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A Boy Showed Up At My Door (Unexpectedly) On a Summer Morning?

Chapter:4

Jul 20, 2023

teddy bear gangster is back huh
i agree
this timeline's akari might be edgier but he's still fl00f underneath

Pretty Boy Gangster

Chapter:24

Jul 20, 2023

description: HNNNN AGONYYYYY HEAD EXPLODE HHHHHHHHH
shinjiro: no biggie, just hurts a lil

Shinjuku X Samurai

Chapter:2

Jul 20, 2023

hm hm, I think this has plenty of potential

Rising Hope

Chapter:1