Feb 22, 2025
ehhh idk I'm still having a very hard time getting immersed in the story. Aside from the frankly cartoonish abuse and overly complex thoughts relative to the narrator, there's also this pervasive feeling that no one is a person. The cast so far is the Evil Family(TM), a group of randos who feel so sad about the main character having a tragic backstory, and the main character casually deprogramming from years, if not a decade+ of abuse in, what, less than a week? She met these plot devices yesterday and she's already thinking about how bad her family is and how they're loved ones? Hello? I don't subscribe to the idea that "it's just a story" when dealing about topics like these, especially in cases like this where there seems to be a legitimate attempt at exploration. The issue isn't just that it's unrealistic, but also extremely simplistic. It's borderline commodified. If the idea is to write about a girl who finds self-worth and connections at the end of the world, is the extreme physical and mental abuse really necessary? If the idea is to explore the effects of abuse on an individual, wouldn't it make sense to, for one, write an actual character and, for two, actually dive into the subject? I'm not sure what to make of the story otherwise, nor do I know what the themes might be. The plot itself is borderline non-existent at this point and the mythos so far isn't anything I couldn't find in a grimdark RPG wiki. Again, there are no characters. Then what is there?
Like Osha said, plenty of readers seem to be enjoying. I not only agree about the melodrama, however, but also find it borderline distasteful. I don't know. It might just be a "not for me" thing and I hesitated on writing this comment because ultimately it's up to you to write whatever you want, but it doesn't seem like the kind of work that'd kawaiify abuse to make the main character "relatable" or whatever the fuck. Insert obligatory disclaimer about art being subjective here. I can see the appeal in these types of stories and the prose and plot progression show obvious competence, so there's that, but what keeps me reading are characters and SOME kind of thematic exploration of whatever political extremism the author is dabbling in at the moment. This moreso seems like a case of 'this story has characters and themes because it is a story'. It might change in the future so I'll keep reading, but... yeah.
kind of reminded me of magical girl site where I burst out laughing whenever something bad happened to the mc because of how extreme it got
