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lolitroy

I usually read back as a courtesy but if you're gonna read JUST so I return the favor, heed my warning: I won't

apparently my writing style is too avant-garde for the weebs or some shit but if you ask me that's just a polite way to tell me I have terminal skill issue

registered at: Aug 04, 2022

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Aug 08, 2024

"why didn't they invite me"

"most of them don't like you"

"yea thats fair"

reading this story while drinking (anything) is a poor idea

Magical Girl SNAFU - Two Facades

Chapter:15

Aug 08, 2024

was this ever mentioned before

Magical Girl SNAFU - Two Facades

Chapter:12

Aug 08, 2024

magical girl zombie

Magical Girl SNAFU - Two Facades

Chapter:11

Aug 08, 2024

To:Kirb

I think it's also that you tell characters have certain traits, but in practice they don't really show them outside of anime moments like Amai puffing out her chest in pride or Sunao s-s-s-stuttering, but to be fair, same, except no autism, just skill issue
idk, I found the bit about Amai's lack of ambition until her magical girl arc interesting, but she kind of just acts like everyone else, so it falls a bit flat, or Mai having a villain moment when interrogating pungirl. It's not really a make or break situation since Sora herself has a very strong voice but it'd be cool to see more varied dynamics ykno. Maybe in the future as the story goes on :P

Magical Girl SNAFU - Two Facades

Chapter:7

Aug 08, 2024

they should be horror film fodder characters tbh

Magical Girl SNAFU - Two Facades

Chapter:8

Aug 08, 2024

I feel like this is the first chapter where we get any real defining characteristics for the girls, but I've been reading about a lot of kabis talking to each other so it feels like a too little too late thing. That said, the reason why this is a 1/10 are the puns.

Magical Girl SNAFU - Two Facades

Chapter:7

Aug 08, 2024

should i ask
nvm

Magical Girl SNAFU - Two Facades

Chapter:5

Aug 08, 2024

this wasn't in the og

I hate how people keep making feminist reboots nobody asked for and ruining the creator's vision

Magical Girl SNAFU - Two Facades

Chapter:4

Aug 08, 2024

I was waiting until you were done with snafu 2 to binge but ur accusations broke me and/or I need a new victim

Magical Girl SNAFU - Two Facades

Chapter:3

Aug 08, 2024

To:Kirb

KAABIWRITE ACCUSATIONS ENDED LESGOO

The Sunless Kingdom

Chapter:4

Aug 08, 2024

To:Lihinel

i am flattered

The Sunless Kingdom

Chapter:3

Aug 07, 2024

To:Kirb

🔪

The Sunless Kingdom

Chapter:2

Aug 07, 2024

To:Kirb

STOP IT WITH THE KAABIWRITE ACCUSATIONS

The Sunless Kingdom

Chapter:2

Aug 07, 2024

hello, the idea seems intriguing but it's hard to follow because the dialogue is clumped together in a single paragraph, and there's no narration separating it so it's hard to know what's happening, who is who, etc. and the problem is even worse in ch2 where the entire thing is one giant wall of text, so I'd suggest you separate paragraphs with one person speaking each time (as is standard) to make it easier to follow along

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Does magic really exist?

Chapter:0

Aug 07, 2024

can confirm, this exactly how interpreters are irl

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The Red Warrior

Chapter:6