Sep 21, 2022
Your writing, while eloquent, is very much a "stream-of-consciousness" style that includes very little description (which you could definitely say is just a product of such a style). Honestly, I'm not sure if it's something that I can even critique, as it is purely a stylistic choice, though a largely uncommon one. And as I said, it's an eloquent style; it paints a vivid picture of the protagonist's personality especially, but at the cost of flushing out anything else descriptively. While I have a very good picture of how the main character thinks and acts, I have no idea what they look like, or even what gender they are (the only clue to their appearance is that beautiful cover art, but the reader can only assume that she's the main character). Obviously, write however you want to, I just wanted to bring this up and I'd definitely like to hear your opinion on it. I've never met anyone who wrote in a style like yours. Regardless, good work! I'm still intrigued by the story and eagerly await your next update!