Jun 11, 2023

We got Houndooms and fourth wall breaks, hilarious once again.

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Jun 11, 2023

Mr. Ray does not seem like the sort of teacher I’d want to deal with on a daily basis 😂 he has quite un-teacherly language. Also heads up, perhaps you meant violent “red” instead of “read” to describe her hair. Another good chapter.

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Jun 11, 2023

“The note that kept haunting me were the dreams they sacrificed to be with eachother […]” Holy cow this line delivery hits so hard, and you’ve gone into such detail to paint a picture of the performance. 🎹 The strong internal dialogue you have going is simply great. Compelling first chapter.

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Jun 10, 2023

Public Morals Commitee to the rescue! And an unexpectedly nice side of Kurosaka that they didn’t expect, nice chapter!

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Jun 10, 2023

Ayato trying to matchmake Kurosaka is like running into an end game boss as the first challenge 😭 poor guy

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Jun 10, 2023

I feel a bit bad for Haku’s mother. For her to lose both of them in the same way. 😓 But this presents our lead-in to the isekai portion. I wonder where it will go from here.

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Jun 10, 2023

Short and sweet first chapter, I love stars so it has captured my interest 🌌

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Jun 10, 2023

Memories from past selves, huh? I can imagine this will be a solid lead-in for what makes this an isekai. Another great chapter, I really love the narration you’re putting together. Especially contrasting some of the major differences between mystics and mages 🧙‍♀️ I thought that was really cool.

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Jun 10, 2023

This was quite a good first chapter. We got an idea of how things worked in Tredland for roles and positions of importance, and got a look into Ed and the twins relationship. Looking forward to keep reading. 📚

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Jun 10, 2023

First Valdo is catching people falling off of buildings, and now he’s fixing TV’s. Seems like a talented fella. There might be a typo after he asks to pass the strawberry jam, just a heads up.

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Jun 10, 2023

Nao seems really sweet, and it’s very kind of her to wait up for Takashi after the game to cheer him up. ⚽️ I wonder what she has planned?

Just a heads up you repeated the line “Jun always found a way to surprise him” twice in the last three paragraphs.

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Jun 10, 2023

Aoki trying to turn Haruto to the side of V-Tubers, once you fall down the rabbit hole there’s no escape 🐰

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Jun 10, 2023

To:Destrab

I thought it might be stylistic, it’s nice to hear it straight from your mouth though to confirm. 😄 A very interesting take on it with how your MC sees properness and such. Thanks for reading by the way!! ✨

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Jun 10, 2023

We’ve reached chapter 3 and Izumi is still super charming. Ichiro is quite the tsundere, but his ballcap can’t hide him from the truth. 🧢 He’s at least intrigued.

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Jun 10, 2023

Congrats on the first chapter!

You present a very vivid picture of a supernatural event occurring with light and these “rivers” it instantly hooked me in. I liked how it was framed too.

I am curious. Was it a style choice not to have the opening of each sentence begin with a capital letter and some other places?

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