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Jan 08, 2026

That's a nightmare to read. Pacing and flow.

Sam 10% Human Art Port REMASTER

Sam 10% Human

Chapter:2

Jan 08, 2026

Pacing and flow. Those are your best friend.

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Hidden Beauty

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Flow and pacing is your friend. Use them.

I Was Given a Second Chance as a Nameless Noble

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Remember the importance of pacing and flow.

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Moon Patrol

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Show, don't tell. Take your time to world build man.

Pivot's Game

Chapter:7

Jan 08, 2026

Don't info dump. I feel like I am drowning on too much info.

Dead Demon Detectives

Chapter:2

Jan 08, 2026

Too much dialogue. Show, don't tell

Dead Demon Detectives

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

This makes me think "VTuber Legend: How I Went Viral after Forgetting to Turn Off My Stream"

Last Stream

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Don't force. Let this be a conversation between you and the reader.

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Unartificial Romance

Chapter:4

Jan 08, 2026

No dialogue in the beginning and so much at the end. Show, don't tell.

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Unartificial Romance

Chapter:3

Jan 08, 2026

A strategy to maximize the slow burn drama might help more.

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Unartificial Romance

Chapter:2

Jan 08, 2026

It's nice but you need to consider pacing and flow.

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Unartificial Romance

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

The dialogue could be expanded on but nice.

Starlight Cover

Starlight

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Anything that you write is a dialogue between you and the reader. It doesn't give that response.

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YOU HAVE MY FACE

Chapter:0

Jan 08, 2026

Try to consider the flow and pacing.

The Sacred Orb - Chapter Origin

Chapter:2