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Jan 13, 2026

Best advice, read more. Build a foundation and grow from there.

Twist 1st Cover

Twist

Chapter:1

Jan 13, 2026

It's ok but the biggest issue is that you have each character indicated with their name in quotes. No book ever does that unless it's for a text. Remove that and you can up your writing level instantly. Feel free to read mine for comparison.

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Miracle Fighters Ascent

Chapter:1

Jan 10, 2026

Writing advice: write everything down on a book first.

Valdoria

Chapter:1

Jan 10, 2026

Writing advice: get a notebook an write in it first

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Fox in the Dungeon

Chapter:1

Jan 10, 2026

Pacing and flow are key to a good story. My tip is write on a notebook first.

Vargshimore

Chapter:1

Jan 10, 2026

To:C0RNL

It takes time. Even I struggled at the beginning. Feel free to read mine. Feedback from your peers is key to growth.

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Onmyoji & Yokai

Chapter:1

Jan 09, 2026

Remember the importance of pacing and flow. Too much word diarrhea.

Margin of Error

Chapter:1

Jan 09, 2026

Too lengthy. Split it into 3 maybe 4 chapters.

Faster than the Speed of Love

Chapter:2

Jan 09, 2026

Too much word diarrhea. Ask yourself if any of your favorite authors ever doing something like that.

Cultivation of Freedom

Chapter:1

Jan 09, 2026

There is too much dialogue. Consider pacing and flow.

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Onmyoji & Yokai

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

A little too wordy but good work.

J-Pop Panic, The Cover

J-Pop Panic!

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Could be split better. Minimum 1000 words a chapter.

Peach Blossoms at Koshigaya in the Eastern Capital, by Hiroshige II (1866).

TenshiCore Hyperdrive : How A Peach Can Save A Teenage Girl

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Flow and pacing are important to any story.

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My life between worlds and dimensions

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

This is clearly something that had been published in the past. I thought the competition stated that it had to be original and unpublished?

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My Peaceful Life as Bloody Twilight is GONE!

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Ugh... Don't write like that.

THE COG STAINED MAN

THE COG STAINED MAN

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