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Feb 19, 2026

Pacing and flow is horrible. Focus on the importance of "Show don't Tell".

I WAS THE PATTERN

Chapter:1

Feb 19, 2026

There is a hollow sense of vanity in the words that you are trying to impart. Focus on the pacing better.

Eros, Take Aim

Chapter:1

Jan 20, 2026

Pacing and flow needs work. Slow down and focus on world building.

One Night in Fuyukage

Chapter:1

Jan 20, 2026

You are chucking too much for the reader to digest at once. Pacing and flow. Feel free to use my novel as reference.

Everyday you, Shining you

Chapter:1

Jan 19, 2026

You need to work on your pacing and flow. You can't expect others to follow you if you don't let each person have their own unique identify. Use my novel as reference.

Kanojo wa Koe dake - A Love Beyond the Screen

Chapter:1

Jan 19, 2026

But you don't have any visuals. Read something simple like Harry Potter or Danmachi. Build a foundation. Feel free to read mine. If you don't like it, it's fine but don't let it discourage you. I've written slice of life, comedy, Isekai, this competition I tried reverse Isekai. Use the competition to explore different genres. Everyone starts somewhere.

Unfinished residue

Chapter:1

Jan 19, 2026

This is not a Broadway play. You are writing a novel. Which novel writes like that? Sorry about being harsh but learn from your peers before chucking something out.

Unfinished residue

Chapter:1

Jan 19, 2026

That is not a prologue. That's just a character profile. Look at mine for example.

Unfinished residue

Chapter:0

Jan 19, 2026

I'm confused. This is a novel competition on the rules about urban fantasy. Example: must take place in Japan or a world inspired by Japan: past, present, or future. Also didn't you submit this before.

Rudra Singha

Chapter:3

Jan 17, 2026

Too chunky. Break it down further. Use my novel as reference.

Tails of Betrayal

Chapter:1

Jan 17, 2026

The best strategy might be to write everything in a book before typing it out. Let it be a meaningful dialogue, not a dragged out one. Try looking at mine for comparison.

Karimono no Kanojo, Himitsu no Honne

Chapter:1

Jan 17, 2026

Too much dialogue. Emphasize show don't tell.

Exorcism is not my Job

Chapter:1

Jan 14, 2026

You chunk your words too much in the beginning. Space out the pacing and flow. Use my novel as reference.

Alphatlas: The Corpse of Fantasy

Chapter:0

Jan 14, 2026

Much better here but still a lot of issues with pacing and flow.

Scum of The World

Chapter:2

Jan 14, 2026

You chunk your words too much in the beginning and then fill everything with dialogue in the end. Space out the pacing and flow. Use my novel as reference.

Scum of The World

Chapter:1

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