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Jan 08, 2026

A little too wordy but good work.

J-Pop Panic, The Cover

J-Pop Panic!

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Could be split better. Minimum 1000 words a chapter.

Peach Blossoms at Koshigaya in the Eastern Capital, by Hiroshige II (1866).

TenshiCore Hyperdrive : How A Peach Can Save A Teenage Girl

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Flow and pacing are important to any story.

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My life between worlds and dimensions

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

1000 words a chapter

Strong determined heroine, VERY Little clothing to wear!

Naija

Chapter:2

Jan 08, 2026

Too wordy. More flow and pacing.

Strong determined heroine, VERY Little clothing to wear!

Naija

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

To:lolitroy

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Shin-Seikatsu: The Hero Party Can't Pay Rent

Chapter:0

Jan 08, 2026

This is clearly something that had been published in the past. I thought the competition stated that it had to be original and unpublished?

Nov 2025 Cover

My Peaceful Life as Bloody Twilight is GONE!

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Ugh... Don't write like that.

THE COG STAINED MAN

THE COG STAINED MAN

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

That's a nightmare to read. Pacing and flow.

Sam 10% Human Art Port REMASTER

Sam 10% Human

Chapter:2

Jan 08, 2026

Pacing and flow. Those are your best friend.

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Hidden Beauty

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Flow and pacing is your friend. Use them.

I Was Given a Second Chance as a Nameless Noble

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Everything is talk, talk, talk. Show, don't tell.

Looking for You Beneath the Light

Looking for You Beneath the Light

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

Remember the importance of pacing and flow.

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Moon Patrol

Chapter:1

Jan 08, 2026

You shouldn't need symbols to indicate a transition to different thoughts. It should be read easily to signal the intent.

KoiSuko V1

Because I'm Falling For You in Lento: KoiSuko Volume 1

Chapter:2

Jan 08, 2026

Show, don't tell. Take your time to world build man.

Pivot's Game

Chapter:7