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Mar 18, 2026

Too much dialogue. You need to do a better job at world building.

Ghost of Memory

Chapter:1

Mar 18, 2026

To:Freaky Weissman

And that is why I need to review my work. I was rushing too fast that I needed a break.

We’re Done Being the Losing Heroines: Our Quest to Fix Our Pathetic Love Lives

Chapter:12

Mar 17, 2026

To:lolitroy

It's because all three of them are the main characters. Most writers focus on first person but writing third person gives more information about the world around them.

We’re Done Being the Losing Heroines: Our Quest to Fix Our Pathetic Love Lives

Chapter:0

Mar 17, 2026

To:Freaky Weissman

I get it. In a normal conversation people talk differently in real life than fiction. It's all about how you pivot the story to the direction you want your characters respond. For me, I design everything future oriented so it forces the reader to return back to a chapter to find the meta humor. I try and construct it beyond one novel but for ten novels.

We’re Done Being the Losing Heroines: Our Quest to Fix Our Pathetic Love Lives

Chapter:11

Mar 16, 2026

To:Freaky Weissman

Thanks it means a lot. Could you elaborate what do you mean quippy? This is the first time I have written an all female cast so setting each character's original voice does become a challenge. I accept all honest feedback.

We’re Done Being the Losing Heroines: Our Quest to Fix Our Pathetic Love Lives

Chapter:11

Mar 16, 2026

If you want to make something entertaining you need to start drafting early on by writing and plotting everything on a sheet of paper. Its too bare bones.

SkullBerry: A Skeleton and Cherub's Love Story

Chapter:0

Mar 15, 2026

It's pretty well written from the beginning but weak at the end. Your world building needs to be constant. It felt as if your imagination fizzled out by the final part.

I Didn’t Mean To Kill My Beloved Wife

Chapter:1

Mar 11, 2026

The story's pacing and flow is a nightmare. Have you ever seen one written like yours that way.

Weapon master

Chapter:1

Mar 09, 2026

To:Vaehsnarrative

Sure but if you can't even keep up with the recommended 1000 words, people will feel disappointed and leave completely. A great novel needs to captative early or else it will be forgotten.

The Hollow Silence

Chapter:2

Mar 08, 2026

It's fine but I hope more world building will be considered as you proofread and edit.

Psychotic Disorder

Chapter:0

Mar 08, 2026

Better than most novels. I recommend adding more micro beats to control the pacing and flow.

Unforeseen: Illusions Of The Midnight Sun

Chapter:1

Mar 08, 2026

I know that you are trying to be mysterious but the rules state that you need to have at least 1000 words a chapter. Plot out your ideas for more meaningful vision.

The Hollow Silence

Chapter:2

Mar 08, 2026

Too much mini dialogue that could try to emphasize the world building a little better.

THREE OF A KIND: I Fell in Love With a Girl Who Has Three Heads

Chapter:1

Mar 08, 2026

This is good but maybe some dialogue like him calling out, screaming, reacting, something. It would create better micro beats to the tension.

Black Wing

Chapter:1

Feb 19, 2026

Better than most but the best strategy is to get a notebook and write everything down, type it up, then write everything down again and repeat. Even if you don't have an ending, work on a vision of your idea and practice on crafting it a little better.

The Draugen and the Drowned Man

Chapter:1

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