Mar 29, 2025
Ahh - I really don't mean to negative. I get what the technique is supposed to be behind this chapter, but it made it feel very disjointed. For me, at least. Went from Elisa to Kael, to a mysterious entity in the Basin, to Elisa practicing somewhere (this one I don't understand its purpose of being here at all), to Lycans, back to Elisa and Kael. There wasn't really anything that connected any of these parts.
I also feel a bit deprived of a deep conversation between Elisa and Kael, given he just found out about her true motives. She even broke down in tears, but no further depth is given to this (which imo it needs, since Elisa - presently anyway - has not been shown to genuinely care about Kael yet to such an extent, so why is she crying? What's the explanation?).
Again, I'm sorry if this is harsh in any way. >_< Funnily enough, each segment included here holds something of interest. I feel that the only thing is that they need their own proper space, not gathered into one short chapter without a link. Without that, it makes it come off as very random.
But now I see that could change depending on how complex the world is. Thanks!
