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Feb 14, 2025
Thoroughly enjoying this work so far and I think you're doing a great job. But as a side note, while I think the way you write character voice is a strength, I do have to suspend disbelief when reading her inner monologue. Her manner of speaking and vocabulary is fairly advanced for a kid who's been isolated all her life. It's not jarring enough to make the writing "bad" by any means, though. Can't wait to read more!
YAY SOMEBODY WITH SOME SANITY
Feb 13, 2025
I was prepared for that song tbh 🤣 You're good at writing humor, this story has been very entertaining so far
"I hadn't seen that gesture since I murdered his family."
That was so unexpected and I feel bad for laughing LOL
Not me forgetting this is a romance and being like "No Elisa, don't fall for it! You're supposed to be hard to get!" 🤣 Another fun chapter, I'm enjoying this
Feb 12, 2025
To:Noa Mora
Yay! Appreciated, thanks!
NOT THE DUOLINGO OWL 🤣
Feb 11, 2025
Oh my gosh, I feel so bad for this poor girl! Yet I'm also hooked to see how her story unfolds.
This seems like it'll be a very interesting read so far, keep up the good work. I'm a bit confused by one section though, why does Elisa ask Cynthia for her name twice?
Wow, I wasn't expecting that twist at all, but I loved it! It tied together the confusions of the chapter very well, and left it off with a solid cliffhanger. You also have a talent at writing engaging dialogue. Great job
Feb 10, 2025
To:Shulox
Thank you! 😊 Hope you stick around!
Jan 15, 2025
To:Bakajanai69
Thank you! I hope you'll enjoy!
Jan 13, 2025
Your method of worldbuilding is great, and your writing style flows very smoothly. I have a feeling something is going to happen to poor Lucy. Going to keep reading!
To:Slow
Thank you so much for reading, Slow! 😊
Jan 09, 2025
To:IchigoParfait
The people in this society are very "interesting" to say the least 😂Thank you for commenting!
But as a side note, while I think the way you write character voice is a strength, I do have to suspend disbelief when reading her inner monologue. Her manner of speaking and vocabulary is fairly advanced for a kid who's been isolated all her life. It's not jarring enough to make the writing "bad" by any means, though. Can't wait to read more!
Yet I'm also hooked to see how her story unfolds.
I'm a bit confused by one section though, why does Elisa ask Cynthia for her name twice?