Jul 29, 2021
To:Bubbles
Thank you for your kind comment, and the time you took to read and analyze the first chapter. I appreciate it.
I am not used to writing, and I can see very well with your intuitive review that the expectations of the atmospheric scenery I described were lacklustre. Even I admit feeling they were very bad.
The pacing is badly written as well, I am thinking of re-writing this chapter, given it was mostly a "let's test the waters out and see how it goes". I can firmly confirm that this chapter is an alpha version and with your insight, I can push myself to become better and pursue a better writing style.
Once again, thank you very much for your time and I will improve myself.
