Nov 03, 2022
To:IceDonut
I truly, deeply appreciate you taking the time to provide me constructive criticism! I take everyone’s feedback into account—it’s the least I can do since you took the time to read my work! This was definitely a time crunch piece for me, and as you mentioned in your feedback, some of the flaws in this story are definitely due to this. I also agree that the evolution from friendship to lovers was quick… I’m a fan of slow burns, so believe me when I say I understand😂 I also have the habit of using less descriptors when feeling rushed, which I’m pretty sure you pointed out as well, but I’m at least glad the writing quality remained at a similar level! I regret not maintaining the cyberpunk elements you’re used to—I also think that would have been a nice touch throughout the story—but the prison setting really took up a large chunk! Little did I realize when I began this project that it’d take up such a large portion of the atmosphere😓 I fought with this story, and I’m just grateful it ended up coherent. I will definitely work on improving my writing skills, because between what you’ve noticed and what I’ve noticed myself, I definitely think I can do better! Every project is a learning experience:) I hope to see you around for the next competition!!:)
I’m also ecstatic you liked the characters… that really sends me over the moon! Thanks again for reading until the end<3
