Sep 17, 2022

What the heeeeck. Just happened. Something isn’t right here, I mean that’s obvious, but there’s a lot Jim is hiding and I don’t like it! I need explanations🥲

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Sep 17, 2022

To:Deleted User

This is Part 2 of the story overall! I don’t think I originally planned on there being parts, so I probably didn’t address Part 1… something else to edit later😂

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Sep 17, 2022

To:Haru Yumera

Thanks!!

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Sep 17, 2022

To:Haru Yumera

Yay! I’m glad you liked it! I was worried some people would be offended by the language but thankfully you weren’t😂

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Sep 17, 2022

To:Deleted User

I’m so glad to hear you’re enjoying it! And yes, it definitely could have used more suspense. I just knew when I started writing this chapter, I wanted Pyro to make it really close before being caught… I’m kind of mean I guess lol.

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Sep 17, 2022

To:Deleted User

Thanks a bunch! I enjoy a healthy dosage of backstabbery in my stories😂

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Sep 17, 2022

To:Deleted User

I definitely wanted to use this chance to introduce other types of cyborgs:) Thanks for reading!

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Sep 07, 2022

To:Xan Ti

Thank you for reading until the end!❤️

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Sep 07, 2022

To:EliteWarrior910

All good points! As someone who loves playing Skyrim, I can easily picture that😂 If a second draft occurs, I'll make sure to specify that Pyro simply doesn't want her apartment gutted just yet! I guess she's still stashing some stuff in there even a "dead" person would need.

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Sep 07, 2022

To:Deleted User

I actually debated over including Walmart, Domino's, etc. On one hand, I wanted this world to be of my own creation, but on the other I wanted it to appear very much like our own. In the end, I decided it would be up to the reader's imagination whether this takes place in the future or possibly an alternate reality:)

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Sep 05, 2022

To:Gulfstream

Thank you! Accounting is already awful, but I’m sure it’ll get better😂 I wish the same for you, if you’re in school!

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Sep 05, 2022

To:Deleted User

Good constructive criticism! All very good things to think about. If I ever get to writing that second draft, I’ll definitely take some of your feedback into account:)

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Sep 05, 2022

To:Deleted User

Thanks for the constructive criticism! This is definitely one of my least descriptive works, so I can see what you mean😅 I suppose it’s something to work on in a second draft!

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Sep 04, 2022

This was such a lighthearted and fun chapter—that means something’s about to go down, right?😅 The fact that Keenan enjoys horrible jokes is just great. That part made me laugh haha.

Hopefully Jim sorts things out with Aiko so they don’t leave things unsaid. I hate it when the third wheel gets hurt, but who is the true third wheel??! The fact that Rio is on the cover has me suspicious🤔

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Sep 04, 2022

I’m both looking forward to it and dreading it. Thanks!!😄

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