Jul 15, 2021
To:JUNIT_
I really appreciate your constructive criticism! I was going to explain later on about how she's a pixie, but I can understand how not stating it in the first chapter could be confusing. I was hoping I could convey it without saying it outright, but perhaps I should be a bit more blunt.
As for the emptiness of the castle, I'm planning on building from that, but I appreciate you drawing attention to it. Now I know what "holes" in my story need work on:)