Jul 28, 2022
To:Brainbo
Thanks for the feedback! Duly noted. I do tend to be dialogue-heavy in my writing, and I am actively trying to improve on that, and I'll keep your feedback in mind as I continue to write.
Reading though this chapter again, you're right. I don't even provide any kind of description for Basttias, save that he's also a historian mage. I don't really describe the workshop either, though it's less important to the story than Basttias is.
I think some of it may have been that I was over-conscious to keep the word count down. The contest rules stated that chapters shouldn't be too long.
