Jul 02, 2025
I'm kind of at a loss for what to say here. I have to admit, I always feel a bit intimidated commenting on your stories. What could I possibly say that you haven't already considered?
It was a beautiful story. Even though he barely had any presence, I really liked the Pontifex. Not only did I feel like he and I could have been friends in real life, but I felt his passages were a masterclass on great characterization in limited space.
And that chapter came at a perfect time. I was on the fence on whether Lavenza was in on the scam, or if she really thought the distant shore existed. And her conversation with the Pontifex reads much differently depending on which is true, but both made very interesting dynamics.
Does the story have some issues? Yeah. You also wrote it in like 24 days, and it was beautiful regardless of its faults. I'm not qualified to critique you anyway.
I hope you win this time. Blessed be the chosen.
