Sep 21, 2019
I'm confident that you made the right call by splitting the chapter in 2 parts. There was a clear distinction between them (the first part focuses more on the blond man, while this one on Davis), which helped understand each one better.
And of course, that leads me to Davis. This was probably the right amount of exposition he needed to become not only a really interesting character, but also someone who is still shrouded in enough mystery to make him much deeper and intriguing (I'd say he's rivaling Lucas and Rio on that right now!). I'm glad we're getting to know him better, to be honest. I mentioned in the previous chapter that his character is starting to make sense, but that still left out his personal philosophy and also the past his parents don't know about. That moral grey line was probably the most remarkable part of this chapter. We still don't know anything about what happened to lead him to kill, but I feel like his reasoning might be justified if it's for a situation similar to Lucas'.
Enough speculation though, please let me fanboy for a moment: Hot damn was Davis such a badass when he fought off the hooligans! I expected him to have some expertise with guns, but swords too? And he used a flash grenade too! Man, I feel like there's a lot of history behind this versatility Davis has mastered!
On another note, I really loved the detail about the guys' kinship. You could have easily painted them evil just because they work for Logen, but that small detail really hit when Kevin fell to the ground, especially after having seen him stay last to pray for Bruno and Brody. What a bro, I'll miss the guy.
And finally, Fenris. I'd say "long time no see", and I know it's been 2 chapters since we last saw him, but it actually felt like a long time! I really like how he doesn't speak at all, yet you manage to make his character seem so terrifying and awe-inducing with his actions, hats off to that!
And Wolfsbane undeniably looks amazing the way you described it! I have a feeling a Tokusatsu I watched when I was a kid had a sword with a similar design, but I can't recall where it was from... Man do I feel old now lol
Anyway, I loved how you went into all that detail about how it works! I might not like gore the least, but I know fear when I feel it, and that detail on where it hit and the entire aftermath really didn't help it go away...
And now you're making me worry about Zach and Scott, and also Fenris' laws... This novel is taking a toll on me, I swear xD
Jokes aside, I really hope we're getting more of this variety later on! I noticed it in the previous couple chapters too, but the scenes now have a more cinematic flow than before! Of course, this matter is completely subjective, and the first volume had a more linear story to tell, but visiting those events happening simultaneously every so often makes them flow much better AND keep the tension up! Bravo for that, I think you're doing it great!
By the way, if you don't mind me asking, how long are both parts combined? They certainly seemed lengthier than previous chapters (which isn't a bad thing here, they were both really enjoyable!), but I have a feeling you really pushed the character limit to its limits with both of them xD
