James K.

James K.

Just another major weeb that loves anime and has an unending list of PTW
Also a pro memester

Hope you enjoy reading my novels! (Currently working on just "I Can Hear Your Thoughts, but it's not like I'm Telling You or Anything!")
I'm always looking forward to reading all kinds of unique stories on the site, even more now that it's taken off in popularity!

Find me on RoyalRoad too!
https://royalroad.com/profile/81874

You thought this was the end of my bio, but it was me, a Dio referen—
Jk it's actually the end

registered at: Jan 27, 2017
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    Oct 06, 2017

    That guard must have been really pissed at Kris to exchange so many vulgar insults with him like it was nothing lmao
    I do recommended toning that down a bit though. Personally I don't mind it, but some other readers might find such language a huge turn-off if overused, unless there is a good reason to use it often.
    Other than that, the whole mock-theft thing was quite interesting as an idea, and I never expected Sylvia to be in the ceremony either!

    I must say that the peak of the chapter was the description of the new King (it's a girl, whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa xD), and it was just beautiful! I got some No Game No Life vibes from that last part too! (She is just like Shiro in my head I guess lol) I'm quite interested to see what kind of comedy duo she and Kris will form!
    Speaking of descriptions, I was quite absorbed into them from the beginning of the chapter! The imagery was plenty vivid, from Kris' house to the whole path to the castle!

    Jio also mentioned this, but the paragraphs being fused together kinda made me lost a number of times. It's a struggle that the Honeyfeed updates are forcing us to either split the paragraphs by hand or write the chapters in the site's editor from scratch for the time being, but since your chapters are short, it shouldn't take too much time!

    All in all, I really can't wait to see what will happen next! I'm fascinated by the potential this story has, so I'm leaving it to you to surprise us! Best of luck on the next chapter!

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    The King's Advisor
    Chapter:3


    Oct 04, 2017

    To:Jio Kurenai

    I've been told from time to time that I'm being way over-descriptive about things, guess this time couldn't be an exception either xD
    To be honest, this was obviously just PART of the entire bus ride (About 12 pages long, and if I had to compare its length to the one in POTR, I'd say it's about twice as long indeed)
    Imagine how long it would be if I decided to make a full adaptation of it, lmao
    In any case, I'm really really happy you enjoyed it despite that!

    Actually Taichi hears everyone's thoughts as if they were saying them out loud. (Probably my fault for overcomplicating those two paragraphs lol, I'm gonna recheck the chapter right away for any corrections/clarifications)
    Long story short, let's assume you're home alone, bored and find yourself hungry (Most terrifying example ever xD). If you said ''I'm hungry'' out loud, it will probably sound like a normal sigh, right? If not, it wouldn't be something too loud.
    Now that you imagined how that would sound...that's it! The volume of your inner voice thinking that is the same as how Taichi would perceive it in his head! (If only I had explained it this simply in the chapter itself........)
    However, your interpretation was honestly some great food for thought! I'll make sure to keep that at the back of my mind and use it in a future chapter, I already got some ideas thanks to it!

    For some odd reason, I made sure to post the links in the comments but somehow they ended up in the chapter and I forgot about that until now lmao, I'm posting them in the comments right now!
    Truth be told, I'm always on PC when I use Honeyfeed, and you can actually drag any text from the site and it will be moved to wherever you want it to! Now it IS a mystery why it didn't cross my mind that this definitely wouldn't work on mobile.....
    As for the word count, a little less than 5900 for this chapter, if you were wondering (probably a lot less than chapter 17 OR 18 of POTR, so you beat me there, we must be even now xDD)

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    I Can Hear Your Thoughts, but it's not like I'm Telling You or Anything!
    Chapter:9



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    Parable of the Renegades [BETA Version]
    Chapter:17


    Oct 01, 2017

    Woah, I thought Lucas was tough, but Davis too?! No normal human would live from banging their head like that! (Scientifically proven!)
    Petition to make Davis a Regenade? I mean, once he would removes his bandages, it will seem like he's shedding his skin, much like a Renegade! That's how it works, right? xD

    I see that the SoL parts are continued. Given that the overall story is dark, what should I think of this?? Makes me wonder about what's coming up 🤔🤔🤔🤔
    I really like how you're delaying the inevitable by foreshadowing it with the tranquil and innocent events of these 2 chapters, it just makes the anticipation for it feel more genuine!

    And that short Yakumo part though... Awwwww, I do like myself some imouto compassion moments like this!

    The peak of this chapter must have been the eating part though... Haven't watched or read Shokugeki no Shoma or any other related series other than Amaama to Inazuma, but I admit that this kind of guilty pleasure is my niche, nuff said. (I was having lunch when reading this, and I pictured myself there instead of Rio as well lmao, WORTH IT) The minute detail on the aesthetics of the plate, even the description of the food each plate had, the whole grabbing-the-food process, Rio's wild imagination... Everything, literally everything, made me want to be there, because the imagery was just too vivid!
    Now then, time to find a recipe for stuffed portabello mushrooms!

    You manage to keep me on the edge of my seat more and more with every chapter, I just can't take anything for granted when it comes to this novel! I really can't wait for the Fenrir encounter, let alone how Lucas will deal with him! Keep it up and coming mate! xD

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    Parable of the Renegades [BETA Version]
    Chapter:18

    Oct 01, 2017

    ''If Rio ever asks for free hugs, I wouldn't give a damn if she would drain all my energy because a ''Free Hug'' sweater makes her all the more adorable!'' -Some guy on the net, 2017
    And now I'm craving for a fanart of her wearing that while asking for a ハッグ xD

    I'm kinda surprised this chapter is more uplifted compared to the last one. Like, a lot uplifted; truly a SoL aspect of the story that was needed! Davis and Lucas' friendship feels much stronger now with all those knee-slapping events (anything but knee-slapping for Lucas of course...)

    I can't help myself but relate Davis to Yumeha for some reason! Maybe it's because both just lift the MC's AND the scene's mood just because they're being themselves, but the verdict is that I found a lot of similarities between the two, which is probably why I took a liking to him all of a sudden!
    Seeing Rio enjoying herself was also a pleasant read! I know the assassin-trying-to-have-fun trope is quite cliched, but it feels like to me that she has a legit reason to feel free and happy after all she's been through! THIS is how strongly I can sympathise with her!
    Now I do wonder when we're getting to see more of Rio and Davis' interactions, they're a perfect comedy duo, haha!

    And all those LN titles... I haven't laughed this hard for quite some time, especially the 2nd alternative, hits close to my shonen home lmao
    So, um...when are we getting a Honeyfeed adaptation of each?? xDD

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    Parable of the Renegades [BETA Version]
    Chapter:17

    Oct 01, 2017

    Now THIS was a huge leap from the previous chapter! It felt like it was someone else writing!

    The story is definitely getting a lot more intriguing right now, that's for sure! By adding Yoshiki's inner monologues and thoughts, it made his character more distinct and easier to understand than before, while also giving some insight to his actions!
    The Elite Five also give off a bizarre vibe that I can't really explain, but it makes me excited for some reason!
    If the story is going to be developed in such a way...BOY IS THE HYPE ALREADY KILLING ME! xD

    I want to point out though that when the Elite Five are introduced and talk to Yoshiki, I had trouble keeping up with who's who. Having a lot of characters entering the stage at the same time is really hard to handle, so my view on this is that you could have introduced them one at a time but give them their respective lines after Yoshiki describes each one! Of course if there was a meaning lying behind how you handled it, then I have no say in this!

    There are also few spelling errors here and there, like ''Comparing my father's life to a criminals...'' (Should be 'criminal's ')
    or 'If there is any God, how could he let him die like this?' is what I used to thing. (Should be 'think')
    You also misspelled Ken's name as Ket at one point: ''As I was analyzing the situation, Ket drew a card from his pocket...''
    Nevertheless, these didn't personally prevent me from enjoying what's happening within the story since they're minor mistakes everyone can make! (As a fast typer, I feel your pain xD)

    Judging from Chesarka's comment, there must have been some grammatical mistakes as well, but I didn't notice any, so there's another major improvement!

    All in all, you improved a lot in just one chapter, which really took me by surprise! Now I have another reason to follow this other than the fact that it's intriguing; it's to see how much you'll grow as a writer too!

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    The Dawn Of A New Age
    Chapter:3


    Sep 13, 2017

    Aah the mysterious father cliche, it's been a while since I last came across that! It feels really nostalgic all of a sudden xD

    On a serious note though, a person close to the MC suddenly disappears/dies, but later learns that they were a part of something huge and probably world-changing...boy am I a sucker for this kind of concept! From a personal standpoint, the whole world-building has been done pretty well, setting up the overall mood from the get-go! On top of that, the story just drew me in as I mentioned before, so this is definitely something I want to follow to the end!

    However, there were a couple of things that kinda bothered me. One is the really fast pacing of the story, and the other is the lack of description, especially compared to the plethora of dialogue. The latter makes the story and characters feel kind of bland and forced, resulting in the former, with both chapters losing me at some points with the fast pacing. What comes to mind right now is Yoshiki's actions in this chapter: It felt like he just agreed to follow Ken without raising a single suspicion about him just because he knew about his father; in other words, robotic.

    In any way, since this is your first work as you mention in the synopsis, I can assure you that you'll slowly and steadily get a lot better! Heck, this novel is already a great start! In the 8 months I've been on the site, I saw a lot of the authors here begin from zero, and over the course of a few months, they had changed drastically for the better that their styles seemed like a complete different person's! If you are passionate about this, then you WILL see that change for yourself in your own work sooner or later, and personally I'm looking forward to seeing it too with every new chapter!

    I know this was quite the long comment (sorry if it bored you...), but you'll get used to seeing such lengthy comments in the site before you can realise it xD

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    The Dawn Of A New Age
    Chapter:2