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James K.

Just another major weeb that loves anime and has an unending list of PTW
Also a pro memester

Hope you enjoy reading my novels! (Currently working on just "I Can Hear Your Thoughts, but it's not like I'm Telling You or Anything!")
I'm always looking forward to reading all kinds of unique stories on the site, even more now that it's taken off in popularity!

Find me on RoyalRoad too!
https://royalroad.com/profile/81874

You thought this was the end of my bio, but it was me, a Dio referen—
Jk it's actually the end

registered at: Jan 27, 2017

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Dec 24, 2017

Aah, it's been quite a while since I last read/seen a story like this. Music, romance, too much guy talk... White Album 2 memories intensify xDD

The premise is pretty good, and the way the events are turning out is interesting too!
I've taken quite the liking to the characters themselves: Yoichi is resorting to music because of his (I assume) monotonous life, Danzo and Koutarou are the hilarious sidekicks that comment on his every move, Akari is mysteriously intriguing AND a musical genius, but most importantly, Sacchi...can we pretty please treasure this precious girl? xD

As much as I did love all these aspects of the story, I reckon that it still needs a few amendments to portray its true charm. The descriptions feel weak and give out minimal imagery, making them seem rushed. It's obvious that you have a very clear image of what you want to portray in mind, so I'm sure you do have the potential to turn this into something jaw-dropping! You could, for instance, spend a couple lines on the appearance of a character to help create an overall image of him/her for the viewer, or maybe some more lines to describe the landscape or the music room, to be more specific. That way, the story won't feel rushed, the imagery will be more vivid and easier for the reader to imagine, and subsequently they will become more immersed into it!
Other than that, I haven't noticed any other issue apart from small syntactic ones (i.e. a lack of commas in a couple parts), but that barely affected the reading experience!

All in all, while there are some issues I believe should be fixed, the story is incredible so far! I really hope to see another chapter soon, so good luck working on it, and happy holidays as well!!

Hopespring

Chapter:2

Dec 23, 2017

To:Jio Kurenai

I'm certain everyone needs someone like Saki beside them! (Perhaps because she hates tomatoes? xDD)

I'm really glad though that you've come to like her even more than before too! To be honest, I'm a bit surprised she didn't leave much of an impact, but that could be because she got about half the page-time (is it okay to refer to screentime in novels like that? xD) your top girl, Eru, got, which makes perfect sense now that I think about it (personality played a huge role too, I assume)

Anyways, I'm really glad you liked the chapter! And please enjoy the holidays as well!! I know I am!

I Can Hear Your Thoughts, but it's not like I'm Telling You or Anything!

Chapter:11

Dec 23, 2017

To:Akazawa Shun

It's not incest though, nor am I planning to take that route xD
Thanks a lot of reading though!

PS: Flat is TRUE justice, haha!

I Can Hear Your Thoughts, but it's not like I'm Telling You or Anything!

Chapter:2

Dec 23, 2017

To:Pyoko

Hahah, I still think it has a long way to go till it reaches the level of the real deal, but I'm extremely glad you loved it nevertheless!!

I Can Hear Your Thoughts, but it's not like I'm Telling You or Anything!

Chapter:2

Dec 23, 2017

To:chesarka

It seems there's no escape from the paragraph bug, is there? xD

Thanks for mentioning these, I'm heading to fix them immediately!

I Can Hear Your Thoughts, but it's not like I'm Telling You or Anything!

Chapter:11

Dec 23, 2017

Ever since I was a kiddo James, I despised the struggle of trying so hard to fall asleep when I was overly tensioned, so even the thought of it ruined my mood. However, I never imagined that there would be a day when I could unabashedly say that this struggle created some positive emotions! (I feel bad for Lucas though xD)

Just from that, I'm sure you got a gist of how much I enjoyed reading this chapter! It would have never crossed my mind that going to sleep could be such an intense, suspensful and intriguing procedure (with none other than Rio, of course, woo-hoo!) but the way you described it, how Lucas was behaving the entire time...I'm left with my jaw dropped, and I can only applaud the effort put into writing this!

The toughest part to read must have been right when Lucas started teasing Rio (TrinityNovels will agree with me on that xD). It was such a horrible move by Lucas that I'd get mad over it like Rio did if I were her, and I honestly want him to get at least a good beating to learn his lesson. I want to believe this foreshadows the reveal of one (or maybe both) of Rio's unknown Laws though!

As always, great job on the chapter mate (especially considering that you were writing on something that wasn't your laptop, I'd feel hella unmotivated if that happened to me xD)
I'm really really looking forward to the conclusion to this! Keep it up!

Parable of the Renegades [BETA Version]

Chapter:20

Dec 23, 2017

I know I finished the main story just a couple weeks ago, but this made me feel extremely nostalgic from beginning to end!

While it didn't have the action and the tension of the previous chapters, it answered a couple questions I had, and was a brilliant way to extend the epilogue a bit so that it feels more fulfilling and complete! I'm pretty much way too used to seeing stories wrap up with a graduation ceremony, but maybe it's because I can relate to the characters during it that I've come to love the trope so much!

If you're planning to release more of this story, know that I'll always be here to gladly read another chapter!

PS: You misspelled ''mitochondria'' in ''the DNA in the motochondria...''

Next to Me

Chapter:13

Dec 10, 2017

To:chesarka

Indeed there were some unexplored questions, but I guess that's the cost of writing a short story, hehe...

That doesn't go to say that it is bad having the reader theorise about things in a story (which I personally love doing!), so I think the fact that you focused more on the two main characters without any filler stories and the like interrupting it halfway was also a major factor in me enjoying it as I did! (Of course, as I mentioned, I wouldn't mind some more chapters to the story to dive deeper into its lore!)

Now that you mentioned that you MIGHT continue the story in some way, though... BOY AM I HYPED! Yes and please, I'm up for more anytime! xD

Next to Me

Chapter:12

Dec 08, 2017

Well, that was undoubtedly one of the most beautiful and heartwarming endings to a short story I've ever seen! (Kind of sad too, to be honest...)

It was honestly a really enjoyable ride. The story was unlike anything I had ever seen/read before, so I was caught off-guard with all the developments you had made with it! I would have never imagined that after chapter 1, Satoshi would go to a university to face his (maniacal, I guess?) father again: THAT kind of development is the one I'm talking about!
The way you were describing the story and considering how much imagery came out of it was pretty excellent for something of this length, a thousand kudos for that!

The characters were truly pretty well-crafted from beginning to end as well! While Satoshi, for instance, seemed a bit plain at first, he managed to get more and more interesting as the story progressed! Nova was probably the most intriguing character in the series if you ask me, with her character concept being probably the most tragic one I've come across so far (I've read other stories about humanoid androids trying to live as normal humans, but man was Nova in a league of her own!)

In any case, I'm repeating myself here: Thank you for recommending this novel of yours to me, I totally loved every moment I spent on it and I must admit that I wouldn't mind more chapters! xD

Next to Me

Chapter:12

Nov 11, 2017

Wow...
Just...wow...

When I finished the chapter, for a single moment, I couldn't take in what happened in a single chapter given its length. I was left mind-blown. I know I said this in the previous chapter and the one before it, but the story is really starting to shape up to reach the climax, and the way you're handling it so far is just amazing! Now I'm even more hooked into it! This ride is gonna get unimaginably great until it ends! I honestly can't wait to see what you're going to use these for, so it's up to you to surprise me with everything you got!

Next to Me

Chapter:10

Nov 05, 2017

To:Gerry Hines

I'm extremely glad you liked Eru so much, seems like she is probably the most liked character in the franchise so far after just one chapter, and for good reason I guess, haha!

In all honesty, I was so, SO invested into writing about her that...well...she almost rivals Saki for the best girl position on my list! As you can deduce from all this, I can't help but hop into the Eru-love train with you all! xD
This could be because I still haven't picked up the prequel about her since I put it on hiatus and missed her a lot as a character (Shameless advertising kekek), but nevertheless I will hint that her personality is to diversify a lot further! I already have big plans in store for her, mostly before she graduates, so I hope you'll be looking forward to that!

Also I think I gave Taichi a really weak start, and people tend to focus more on the girls in such series (so do I, whoops xD), so a combination of both is kinda devastating for his character (Poor Taichi... qwq), but you mentioning that he's started growing on you is a great thing! It means he's finally getting some recognition, which will definitely prove useful later on!

It would be a shame though

if something

happened to him

all of a sudden

(I'm having way too much fun doing this, aren't I XDD)

I Can Hear Your Thoughts, but it's not like I'm Telling You or Anything!

Chapter:10

Nov 01, 2017

To:Jio Kurenai

Let's see...
The male-female ratio in the novel so far is 5-7, so I believe I have to balance it...by adding another girl in a couple chapters from now! xD
So as you can understand, there will be one more girl appearing shortly, and that chapter will most likely be the final one introducing new characters, for this arc at least! If you ask me though, I think Eru will still stay at the top for you, mostly based on how much I enjoy writing about her of course. I'm really glad you saw that enjoyment first-handedly as well!

Judging from how you have build up your characters in PoTR, I can definitely see some striking similarities between my characters' traits and yours, so reading about them always leaves a huge grin behind because of that correlation/connection! It's like we know each other's likings in characters inside out! xD

I Can Hear Your Thoughts, but it's not like I'm Telling You or Anything!

Chapter:10

Nov 01, 2017

We're finally heading straight to the climax, aren't we! I can feel the tension increasing all of a sudden!

The father doesn't seem as intimidating as I imagined him to be (not that it's bad or anything), but I do have this feeling of uneasiness when he's around Satoshi and Nova. If you're planning to have him become more sinister, I believe this introduction was the perfect way to foreshadow that!

Next to Me

Chapter:9

Nov 01, 2017

Writing is like a hobby, if you ask me: If you feel like it, you do it. There's no need to be sorry if you don't feel like writing, and the fact that you openly admitted it is just applaudable! It takes a lot of courage to do that, especially in a novel writing platform like this one, and I hope your decision was for the best!

I'm honestly going to miss this novel a lot. I really liked the concept, how you built up the story, the characters themselves...you already know I could go on forever about it! I personally want to thank YOU for the wonderful time I've spent on your novel while it lasted, it was just amazing! Best of luck moving on mate!

The King's Advisor

Chapter:4

Oct 28, 2017

Now THAT was an interesting read! I know it's still not finished, but if the road to the climax is THIS interesting...well, you already know that I'm expecting the climax itself to be great! xD

To be honest, short stories rarely catch my attention, so I prefer to avoid them altogether. Some exceptions exist though (Shelter, for instance, which I think you had mentioned you liked, if I recall correctly?), and this story is one of these exceptions! The plot is intriguing and unique, the characters don't feel bland, and the whole thing really wouldn't have worked out in any other format! For a short story to be so good, I can't help but tip my hat to you! You sure knew what you were talking about when recommending this to me!

There is one thing I want to point out though, and that is that your storytelling (at least in this particular novel) is a bit...confusing, I should say? It's not that I don't get what the story is about and where it's heading, but I feel kinda lost at times. Maybe it's because of the backs-and-forths you make to help the reader not forget parts of the story, or it could be that I'm just not used to stories of this length yet, at least in novel format, but I can't say for sure. But either way, it's not that huge an issue since I managed to put the story in order in my head!

All in all, this story has a lot of potential to get more hype than it is now, and I really can't wait for that moment to come!

Next to Me

Chapter:8