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Real Name - D. C. Priest
Aspiring author from England
Feel free to contact me on Discord: TheGrompPapa#7575
https://www.patreon.com/c/DCPriest
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Jul 26, 2021
To:Cours Twent
Thank you very much!
Jul 25, 2021
To:He'snotevenconscious
Thank you very much! I really wanted David’s inner conflict to be at the heart of this story, so I’m happy to hear that you really like that part of the novel
Jul 23, 2021
A very good, intriguing start to your story that was very easy to read and follow. I wish I could give you more helpful comments or feedback, but I think everyone else in the comments have already covered what else I wanted to say.
Keep up the good work and I’m excited to see where this is going!
To:Joshua Lundquest
Thank you very much
Jul 21, 2021
To:Pearlyn.M
It's in the Unforeseeable Bonds chapter.
'She lifted one of the flaps and took the handkerchief, and quickly rubbed her face and elbow were (where) scratch marks were visible'
To:Bubbles
Thank you so much for the feedback and I hope you’ll enjoy the rest of the story just as much, if not more.
I’ll have a look back over the areas you’ve pointed out as well and see what changes/improvements could be made there as well.
To:Sevenlock
Thank you and I will.
The first chapter is quite fast-paced on purpose and that’s because, ultimately, this isn’t David’s family’s story; this is his story, so I didn’t want to have the section before David’s story truly begins get dragged out unnecessarily.
Caught up the other day but I was too busy at the time to leave a review, but I have to say I really enjoyed this initial outing of Realm Assassin.
The premise is cool, the potential is vast and I can’t wait to see you tap into it.
There were a few awkward sentences and phrases here and there (and one spelling mistake where I think you meant ‘where’ but put ‘were’); other than that, I think it’s a good start.
