Dec 08, 2021
Woah woah woah! This is masterful! I couldn’t stop reading. I just want more of this. The way you write is really interesting, unlike anything I’ve seen before. It almost seems surreal, but it’s distinct in that. Switching from the mall to a murder scene is something I’d never heard of. Really bold ideas!
The story is simple but gripping. I feel compelled, despite its short length. Though I do wish it could have been longer, I think it is really fitting to have a shorter story for this plot. The ending scene with the newscast (that’s what I imagined it as) was *really* cool. I’ve done a newsletter at the end of one of my novels to go over post-story information, but your newscast format is so much cooler. I might yoink it someday, hah. Imitation is the sincerest form of flattery. ;3