Nov 07, 2022
Gotta say, I agree with the others. The character chemistry was very nice and Challengers was an overall fun read. I especially enjoyed the comedy. Thinking of good ol James splatted on the Minstral's windshield still gives me a good chuckle.
One thing I will say however is that, the story was a bit hard to take seriously at times. And I think that's because the comedy at the beginning was pretty goofy. Again, I think, I'm not sure.
I don't really have any advice for setting tone. I'm also making it out worse than it really is. Tis a minor issue at best and a purely me issue at worst.
Anyway. It's evident you've improved a great deal from your previous work and I'm excited to see what you write next!