Jul 14, 2022
To:Deleted User
It's been so long since I've read version two, I had to go back and find what you were talking about haha.
I understand what you mean though. The sentence fragments are a bit of a stylistic choice because that's how I generally think, but I think I've gotten better at handling them. They should be less frequent in version four!
Thanks for pointing out that second sentence. The 'I was next' one. I usually get the critique that what I write can be cryptic, confusing, or just unclear and I'm never sure exactly what's unclear. Reading through my writing though, I can actually find more points like the 'I was next' bit because you pointed it out. So thanks again for that.
And thank you again for giving me feedback on version two. I'll make sure to keep it in mind while writing version four!