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Aug 25, 2021

To:kazesenken

I see. I've learned a lot since I started, and as I did a quick re-read it is pretty mixed with everything. Imo it gets better as the chapters go on bc I started looking up some tips and stuff.
Also, this being my first time writing something big, I wanted to stretch myself and try and hit as many different "genres" as I could. The supernatural theme is the most prevalent (i hope) later on but still maintains certain aspects of romance, comedy, and drama to keep the reader engaged.

Densetsu Kenshi: Beginnings

Chapter:2

Aug 25, 2021

To:kazesenken

The synopsis goes for the whole story and I'll be the first to admit that it doesn't lead into the first few chapters very well. I've thought about putting in a prologue but I'm not sure how well it would do considering how late it is. thanks for the comment!✌️

Densetsu Kenshi: Beginnings

Chapter:1

Aug 25, 2021

Sad.... all good things come to an end, such is life. 😪😪😭

Reincarnated? Really? As what? Some kind of Genie? (RAG?)

Chapter:5

Aug 24, 2021

best origin story i've read in a while! viva snazzy-chan

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:2

Aug 24, 2021

something is rising and its not the shield hero.... snazzy-chan and thiccness were definitely my favorite parts! i know im late to the party on this one but i'll be reading more!

check out my novel if you get the chance!

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:1

Aug 24, 2021

Great prologue! Also must compliment on the cover and synopsis bc those brought me here, great job and excited to keep reading! also a question, how come you use brackets for dialogue?🤔

check out my novel if you get the chance!

CirCular

Chapter:0

Aug 24, 2021

Its an interesting story with a pretty good start. Obviously I've only read up to here, but theres a lot of potential! A piece of advice to share with you is to always work on showing instead of telling in your writing, it can really help the reader stay engaged! Keep it up!

check out my novel if you get the chance!

The Creator

Chapter:2

Aug 24, 2021

Its a good start! Keep updating bro!

check out my novel if you get the chance!

Forbidden Words

Chapter:3

Aug 24, 2021

Introducing Izumi and Kitaro from the shady organization Thermo Corp.! Let me know what you think about the chapter as we really learn about Seiji and how this mysterious woman seemingly helps him overcome his sinful past! ✌️⚔️

Densetsu Kenshi: Beginnings

Chapter:9

Aug 23, 2021

To:Deleted User

Thanks for the tips, I don't have any experience with writing so I'm really freeballing on everything but I'm glad that you can still pick up on their voices. Thanks again!😎🤗🤩

Densetsu Kenshi: Beginnings

Chapter:6

Aug 23, 2021

To:Taylor Victoria

Thanks! I hope you enjoy it!! 🙌✌️

Densetsu Kenshi: Beginnings

Chapter:1

Aug 22, 2021

To:Deleted User

Thx! I really like testing myself with this and writing about new events and I felt the date scene unexpectedly gave a lot of growth to the both of them. Question, was the dialogue hard to understand at times or did it have a good flow and you could pick up on their distinct voices? 🤔

Densetsu Kenshi: Beginnings

Chapter:6

Aug 22, 2021

To:Deleted User

I'm glad you like Takenaka! I'm still working out all the different interactions with Seiji and everyone else while keeping them in character, so I'm glad that it turned out good!

Densetsu Kenshi: Beginnings

Chapter:8

Aug 21, 2021

I really like how you have descriptions throughout, but it's super balanced and doesn't feel overbearing. I think that's super important when establishing a foreign world that could be difficult for someone to picture in their head. Also if you don't mind, what's your inspiration for the plant weaponry? I think it's super unique and I'm excited to keep reading!

if you could check out my novel too I'd appreciate it!!👉👈

REALM ASSASSIN

Chapter:2

Aug 21, 2021

To:ocrali

Thanks for the comments! I'm really happy you enjoyed the chapter, with this one I just decided to have some fun with it while still moving the story along. Takenaka is written to be a religion freak, so he'll always be spouting off some bible references that i find that can fit with the story, while also keeping the reader interested and laughing bc hes a weirdo compared to the rest. 👊💌

Densetsu Kenshi: Beginnings

Chapter:8

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