Jun 16, 2022
I’m not sure why you said to be gentle, this is genuinely written quite well. If this is what you’re producing in your second language then I’m curious as to what your first looks like.
Of course there are minor errors here and there, for example, “This time Yuri had no idea, what was going to happen.” Some might consider the extra comma in between anywhere from unnecessary to a grammatical error, but nitpicking shit like that is generally a sign that your story is solid. Looking forward to the next chapter.
(If I don’t continue reading immediately, I’m sorry, but I’m trying to focus on my contest entry and Isekai is one of the genres I struggle the most to enjoy. At the very latest I’ll get to this in September after the writing phase of MAL x HoneyFeed ends.)
