Sep 21, 2022
To:00NI
First of all, I'd like to say that I very much appreciate the time you took to write this out, and compile your thoughts. It means a lot that someone's willing to put this effort to me. Thank you very much.
Now as a response to your statement.
Description of surroundings/environment is definitely a weak part of my writing, even when I choose to write third person/non stream of consciousness style. I don't think my current style is mutually incompatible with visual description, and plenty of books I've read actually incorporate it quite well, so I would argue it's moreso a fault on my inability to do so. I'll definitely keep this in mind for the future amongst other things, so you have my thanks!
As for the main character's description, this I find is more complex. It occurs to me, that it's quite hard to introduce a character's description of themselves given that one rarely contemplates one's own looks in such a manner. Might be that I have to make a scene where the MC looks in the mirror or has a monologue about herself. In my other works, I have had alternate POV's, so it might be that I'll just have a description of the MC come through another character. I definitely think this is a inherent weakness of the style I chose, and I appreciate that you brought it up.
On another note. If I might recommend, 'The Remains of the Day' by Kazuo Ishiguro (a story about a aging British butler), has a similar stream of consciousness style, though done much better, if you'd like something to read one day.
Ultimately, I'd be curious as to your opinions on the style further down the line. I'll admit, that I write this way because I find it the most comfortable and enjoyable, and think it comes through especially well for strong protagonists/narrators and fight scenes.
Thank you very much for reading, once again! I eagerly write to await your opinion, haha.
