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Short story guy forced to write long ones.

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Jun 20, 2023

Dang, as a child man already got rizz. Jokes aside here're my thoughts.
Very nice first read, the writing was fluid and easy to follow. The way you described Yori was short, yet easy to imagine so keep it up!
One slight criticism though is that some sentences are too long and you could have split them up. This makes the flow better, as I've heard from another guy.

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:0

Jun 19, 2023

To:Kaisei

Thanks for the comment! I tried to make the mc still somewhat likable even though there are clear mental problems lol. Looks like my efforts weren't for nothing.

Escapism

Chapter:1

Jun 19, 2023

The way you referenced Jojo through describing them I can't 💀

Pigeon on a Power Line

Chapter:2

Jun 18, 2023

Wow. You certainly know your way around with words because goddamn is the vocab and fluidity of your sentences masterful. I've only read like half of the weeklies but yours, in a grammatical ranking, would definitely earn a spot along the tops. Certainly do keep it up, I'm very excited at how you will execute this concept lol.

That Time I Was Reincarnated as the Villainess's Stat Menu and Tried to Get Her Attention

Chapter:1

Jun 17, 2023

Though do paraphrase a little, I can see a number of repeated vocab and sentence structure whenever there’s dialogue. Other than that it’s a nice read.

Would You Paint My Dunk

Chapter:8

Jun 17, 2023

I like how you clearly remember that this is a romance and leave a perfectly significant role for Jessica. I usually dwell too much on the mc and forget about that so I’m learning a lot from you lol. Thanks and keep it up!

Would You Paint My Dunk

Chapter:8

Jun 17, 2023

I just re-read this with the rec soundtrack and gotta say the enjoyment was way better lol.

Would You Paint My Dunk

Chapter:3

Jun 16, 2023

To:kazesenken

The search prior to the mirror was also at night time, as said by the mc so it’s all in the same night lol. But ig i made the time-skip too vague and made it confusing.

Escapism

Chapter:2

Jun 16, 2023

To:kazesenken

Thanks for the feedback and for reading 🤩. I want to say though that the reason why Stan was so lifeless in the second half was to contrast his excitement at the end, as well as showing he’s tired of the girl. But i do agree it’s a bit of a drag seeing this guy act lifeless for so long.
And regarding the first paragraph, I totally agree that it asks the reader too much to imagine lol. I was going to compare it with those echo you’d see in horror but failed to unfortunately.

Escapism

Chapter:1

Jun 16, 2023

Piziv 💀. Anyways, really fun and exciting so far. I’ll be reading more when I catch up with others.

Grace Dances Upon the Clouds

Chapter:1

Jun 16, 2023

Grace took to role-playing real quick lol. Jokes aside, I’m seeing colors everywhere now, the way you described everything was so mesmerizing. That and the way you introduced the mysterious vibe, what a prologue!

Grace Dances Upon the Clouds

Chapter:0

Jun 16, 2023

To:Cherry Star

The psychologist i mean. Most of the ones i’ve seen were men so my sexist ass brain just fries when it’s a woman. Sorry for the confusion lol.

Soulmates of loneliness

Chapter:4

Jun 16, 2023

The nurse is rather reasonably cute here lol.

Soulmates of loneliness

Chapter:4

Jun 16, 2023

I like how cute Raku was trying to figure out Ren’s past lol. You really know the way to make ppl’s heart melt.

Soulmates of loneliness

Chapter:3

Jun 16, 2023

The interactions were so wholesome, aaaa my heart.

Soulmates of loneliness

Chapter:2

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