Aug 05, 2022
To:Xiellion
I think I get more or less what you say. I agree that I shouldn't tell directly character's personality traits. I tried to avoid it but as you pointed it out I'll try to pay more attention on it. That said, I don't think I revealed that much about my characters, there's much more left to discover about them. Well, you'll judge it by yourself if you keep on reading hahah!
As for the unsettling narration I am a bit surprised of your reflection. It's not that rare even for an omniscient narrator to be asking questions. I mean, why wouldn't he? I assume it's a writing style.
In any case, thank you for reading and for your honest comment!