Oct 10, 2025
Oh dear. So the story has ended. Well, first I wish all the best to Tensei and that Ray will achieve to bring her to their world next! ( I also hope for him he'll find a suitable name for that poor baby to come )
I appreciated the characters dynamics you had there, it was among else pretty funny to see Rose mess with Ray. The main characters are nicely enough fleshed out. You made it work with the POV swaps.
There where also multiple layers to the plot spread all along the narration, hinting at the issues the more we get in, so that's cool. Although I'm not a fan of the 100% evil antagonists, Mala- *ahem* Malwaria didn't even bother me there, 'have to say it works pretty well with your concept and the comedy inclination of your story.
As for world-building mmm.. there were a few details here and there which made me skeptical but it's just me being nit-picky. For instance, the fact Ray needs someone to control his moves but the other isekai'd characters like Rose don't need to
saying it's a class thing didn't truly convince me. But then again it isn't harmful as for the reading experience.
The moment I got the most invested in the story was starting from the chapter Davy got zombified. And maybe it's just me but I found from that moment the story became quite heartfelt, and this was my favourite part about your story. The narration, the feelings you described felt sincere.
Anyway, congrats for finishing your story on time, Taylor!🎉