Dec 23, 2024
To:lolitroy
I see what you mean. Although in the beginning it is announced that Aurora will try to charm Marygold, she hasn't made until now any real move ( yeah, sorry Aurora ) to help it happen so I guess the plot seems foggy. Normally what comes in the forthcoming chapters should ground the plot. See if it works ; )
Also that's true dialogues often have these "reminders". Well since last time I wrote for the contest my entry got too many of them to my eyes ( I found it a bit too heavy with all the "he said" things ) I decided not adding it when not necessary, only referring to the speaking character afterwards. I thought it would be ok because the story doesn't have many characters, but if it confuses you I will try to pay it more attention in the next chapters!
'Glad you still enjoy the story, and thanks for sharing your thoughts. uwu
