Jan 14, 2025
aight I'm still mentally drained and don't think I'll do these for a while but making an exception for your story
Like I said before, I really REALLY enjoyed this. It was pure goofy in the best way possible. It was silly yet sincere, and no matter how out there things got, it somehow kept this whimsical, floaty charm to it that made it incredibly soothing on top of funny.
Aurora was a hilarious character to follow, and while I was neutral on Marygold (his name is still the most insane out of any love interest in this competition), I was increasingly endeared by the way he reacted to things that would probably freak anyone else out. I don't know, they're a pair of dorks and I'm glad they're together.
Niji and Janaa were also cool, but while there's been plenty of robot servants this competition, there's only been one animal sidekick that isn't enhanced in some way, just... a talking animal. A talking animal who likes to troll and be emotionally manipulative. (lore accurate parrot)
If I HAD to say something negative, I guess it'd be that the plot is all over the place, events just kind of happen with little connection, the climax happened because that's just what stories have without much fanfare or buildup, that the syntax made things a bit hard to follow at times... but I also don't give a fuck because I liked this story too much to even muster the braincells to nitpick 
I'm definitely checking out more of the stuff you've written because this is honestly right up my alley. There's a lot of entries this competition that aren't the most technically flawless but which have a certain quality to them that makes them incredibly enjoyable (to me) regardless, and this was one of them. If it were a physical book, it'd be one of the ones that are torn apart at the edges because I read them over and over again even if there's others I think are "better". Very fun, cute, wholesome story, and I can't wait to read more from you oncemybrainworksagain :D
