Aug 23, 2023
To:ChronoSigma
Some good comments here!! You're right about the "Did Madam Claire [...] know me in another world?" line being more an intentional clue, but I can see how it might seem weird for Roki to have the thought. My idea was: since in the date scene with Mia (after the kelpies and lake), Mia asked Roki if they'd met before, it wouldn't be too much of a stretch for Roki to wonder the same thing about Claire. 🤔 But maybe I should edit that, because I can probably word it another way and still get the hint across, without it seeming directly like Roki's thought.
"Goodbye my childhood dream" Was just me poking fun at the fact that most kids hope to have magic when they're young 🤣 not really a major part of Jun's character or anything. But again something I might revise for clarity! 👍
I've had a week of ups and downs, and it's always easy to start doubting my writing when I'm feeling critical of myself 😆 so I've got to remember to read these comments and remind myself that people like my work!! 👍