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Mario Nakano 64

It's a me. I'm an aspiring light novel writer hoping to one day see my works in anime form. I hope that my works at least brighten up your day and give you something to look forward to.

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Dec 20, 2025

Author's Commentary #21:

Time to talk about Chapter 21: Reaper vs Bongcloud.
With a title like that, you know the game for the chapter is going to be good. And it most certainly was. Okisato absolutely humiliated Red Reaper, and made him rage.

Now technically speaking, this isn't a pure Bongcloud Attack game, in fact, this opening doesn't have an official name yet. We'll call it the Bongcloud Gambit. Now in terms of comparisons to the original, the game itself is unaltered, but the events surrounding it are.

In the original, Iori had long-since left London, while Okisato didn't have any DESPER keys at all during Season 5. Red Reaper also challenged him outright, with them both taking to the skies, though Okisato still ended up warping to China as his prize for winning, while Red Reaper was banished to the depths of the ocean.

Here, I wanted Iori present mainly so that she'd be aware of Red Reaper's powers, as in the original, she only learns of them via Streamer Royale, a crossover novel for all my series. Obviously for the volume releases, I'll be reducing Streamer Royale's role to just an offhand mention.

Getting back to Okisato, I felt having him use the DESPER key to warp to China made more sense as in the original, it kind of felt like he just randomly decided to go there. Now the angle is that he wanted to drag Red Reaper as far away from London as he could.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

En Passant Grandmaster Volume 3

Chapter:21

Dec 20, 2025

And Volume 2 is done. Gotta say, I like how you expanded things compared to the original. Of course, I'm more curious as to how you'll approach Volume 3 considering how much you've been hyping up revising it.

Face of Eternity : The Journey of a Little Angel

Chapter:62

Dec 20, 2025

Didn't remember things ending with a somber undertone. I like that you added consequence and showed that Yalda wasn't able to save everyone.

Face of Eternity : The Journey of a Little Angel

Chapter:61

Dec 20, 2025

I think we just barely met the queen in the latest chapters of Volume 4. Will she be given an earlier introduction, or are you still planning things out in regards to Volume 4 stuff?

Face of Eternity : The Journey of a Little Angel

Chapter:60

Dec 20, 2025

Suck up dis herb.

Face of Eternity : The Journey of a Little Angel

Chapter:59

Dec 20, 2025

[Game log #36]

Here's the game between Okisato and Heather from Chapter 45. This time, it's a Gothic chess game, meaning the board is 10x8 and the empress, also know as the chancellor, which moves like a knight and rook, and the princess, also known as the archbishop, which moves like a knight and bishop, are now part of the game. Gothic chess is a chess variant that improves upon Capablanca chess by rearranging the starting pieces in order to make things more fair.

I have no idea if there's an analysis engine for Gothic chess, but here's the game anyway.

Note: H = Princess/Archbishop while E = Empress/Chancellor.

[Event "Fairy Gauntlet"]
[Site "London, England"]
[Date "2024.08.17"]
[Round "N/A"]
[White "Heather Fairy (2520)"]
[Black "Okisato Tanabe (2675)"]
[Result "0-1"]

1. h7 h8 2. Nj6 Ne9 3. f7 Nj9 4. Hh5 Hf8 5. e7 Hxe7 6. Qe5 Hg9 7. Nk8 Eh9 8. Hj7 Nxf7 9. Qf5 Hxh7 10. Qxh7 Ki11 11. Hxh9+ gxh9 12. Qxf7 Ni7 13. Qf8+ Kh11 14. Nxi7 hxi7 15. Qe8+ f9 16. Qh5 Bg9 17. Qg6 Qg10 18. j6 h8 19. jxi7 hxi7 20. Qh7+ Kg11 21. Qg7 Kf10 22. Qxd10 Rh11+ 23. Ki4 i6 24. Qd8+ e9 25. Qd10+ Kg11 26. Qxg10+ Kxg10 27. Bi8+ Kg11 28. Ee5 i9 29. Exe9 Bf8 30. Ee11+ Kh10 31. Exf9+ Ki11 32. Exf8 Rh5 33. Eg10+ Kh11 34. Ee11+ Ki10 35. Exc10+ Ki11 36. Ee11+ Ki10 37. Nf5 j9 38. Bg6 Rh10 39. Rh4 Rd10 40. Bf7+ Kj10 41. Bxj11 Rxj11 42. Rh11 Rxd5 43. Rxj11+ Kk9 44. Nh6 Rd4+ 45. Ng4 Rxg4#

En Passant Grandmaster Volume 3

Chapter:45

Dec 20, 2025

[Game log #35]

Here's the game between Okisato and Red Reaper from Chapter 43, which features a brand new opening I dub the Baron Buster Gambit. I guess technically it features 2 new openings as 1. a3 d5 2. e4 dxe4 is the Anderssen Opening: Prussian Gambit, while 1. a3 d5 2. e4 dxe4 3. Ke2 is the Prussian Gambit Accepted: Baron Buster Gambit.

[Event "Fairy Gauntlet"]
[Site "London, England"]
[Date "2024.08.17"]
[Round "N/A"]
[White "Okisato Tanabe (2675)"]
[Black "Red Reaper (2773)"]
[Result "1-0"]

1. a3 d5 2. e4 dxe4 3. Ke2 e5 4. Ke1 Nf6 5. Nc3 Nc6 6. d3 exd3 7. Bxd3 Bc5 8. Bg5 Bxf2+ 9. Kxf2 Qd4+ 10. Kf1 e4 11. Qe1 Be6 12. Nxe4 Nxe4 13. Nf3 Qxb2 14. Rb1 Qa2 15. Ra1 Qb2 16. Bxe4 O-O 17. Kf2 f6 18. Bf4 Rac8 19. Rb1 Qa2 20. Rxb7 Rf7 21. Qc3 Ne7 22. Ra1 Qc4 23. Qxc4 Bxc4 24. Rxa7 Nd5 25. Nd2 Ba2 26. a4 Nxf4 27. Rxa2 Re7 28. a5 f5 29. Bd3 Nxd3+ 30. cxd3 Rd8 31. a6 Rxd3 32. Ra8+ Kf7 33. a7 c5 34. Rf8+ Kxf8 35. a8=Q+ Re8 36. Qc6 Rdd8 37. Nc4 Rc8 38. Qd6+ Re7 39. Ra7 Re8 40. Ne5 f4 41. Nc6 Kg8 42. Nxe7+ Kh8 43. Qe5 c4 44. Ng6+ hxg6 45. Qxg7# 1-0

En Passant Grandmaster Volume 3

Chapter:43

Dec 19, 2025

Really should break up these large paragraphs when they're a mix of dialogue and not.

Moonlight Phoenix Girl

Chapter:20

Dec 19, 2025

Caught a grammar error: It's "threw the ball at my face" not "throwed the ball at my face".

BARAMAKU RANSHIN

Chapter:14

Dec 19, 2025

Some real chunky paragraphs there.

Moonlight Phoenix Girl

Chapter:19

Dec 19, 2025

One thing I'm noticing is that you tend to have characters' dialogue be on the next line down when there are times it's perfectly fine to include it in the same line. For example, you often have,
"And so I said,
[character's dialogue]"
"And so I said, [character's dialogue]" is perfectly fine, but if it's more a style choice, I won't critique the matter.

BARAMAKU RANSHIN

Chapter:13

Dec 19, 2025

Star Platinum?

Moonlight Phoenix Girl

Chapter:18

Dec 19, 2025

I take it the previous chapter was accidentally skipped over as I was a little lost at the start of the chapter.

Moonlight Phoenix Girl

Chapter:17

Dec 19, 2025

So is this deliberately blank, or did you accidentally forget to put the chapter here?

Moonlight Phoenix Girl

Chapter:16

Dec 19, 2025

To:Jekko

You're not alone. There's nothing here on my end either.

Moonlight Phoenix Girl

Chapter:16

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