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Mario Nakano 64

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May 08, 2024

Author's Commentary #19:

Time to talk about Chapter 19: Ides of March Part 4.
Justice has finally been served to Fujiko. Originally, Fujiko was just meant to get shaved, but since she became such an irredeemable villain, I felt she should be given no mercy, which is also why she ended up nude as well. She's also now going to get the entire makeover plan she planned to give to Yuni, courtesy of Harumi Ginkawa. I'll talk more about Harumi in a future commentary. For now, I'll talk about what the initial draft for this chapter was like.

Back when Escape Witch was planned to be more lighthearted and episodic, the Madoka vs Fujiko escape game was planned. It would have played out almost identically to what happened here with Madoka escaping in the blink of an eye and Fujiko losing and going bald.

Of course back then, Fujiko was nowhere near as irredeemable as she ended up becoming in the final draft. She still would have had a massive bald fetish and been a yandere, but she would have been much tamer. The original idea for her character was that she would be the daughter of the Superindent general and was allowed to freely shave the prisoners. Obviously, some of those ideas carried over to the final draft.

As for the original arc, the Madoka vs Fujiko was actually intended to be the start of it. Yuni would still be present at the salon, but would have gone there with Madoka rather than getting kidnapped by Fujiko. After the game was done, Izumi and Hanabi would then show up and trap Madoka and Yuni in the salon chairs. They'd then hook up bombs to the backs of the chairs as well as put sticks of dynamite in Yuni's and Madoka's hair. Madoka would then break out easily, but due to the bomb, would be forced to take off her boots in order to free Yuni with her feet. Once Yuni was free, she and Madoka would then carefully maneuver to the backs of their salon chairs and deactivate the bombs attached to them at the same time. As for Fujiko, she would have been tied up in the back. Back then, Izumi and Hanabi were originally intended to be introduced as antagonists that would later become allies.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

Escape:Witch [Remake]

Chapter:19

May 07, 2024

Author's Commentary #18:

Time to talk about Chapter 18: Ides of March Part 3.
We have our first yuri kiss of the series! Things are finally starting to look up. If this ever gets an anime, you can bet the Fairy Tail "Wow" sound effect will play as soon as the goons notice Madoka.

Funnily enough, this chapter actually underwent the least amount of changes between it and the original. The first notable change is that instead of having the middle part of the chapter be told as a flashback, I had it occur immediately when it was meant to. This also confirms that all the stuff with Madoka, Emeri, and Serika, took place before Fujiko was about to pour the wax on Yuni.

Speaking of Yuni, her hair is safe for the moment, and Madoka is coming to save the day. The outfits Madoka and Emeri wear are also their stage outfits they wear when Madoka films her magic videos. Prior to her face reveal, Emeri simply wore a motorcycle helmet, but now that she's done a face reveal, she's now sporting a white witch hat in reference to the fact that white hats are considered good hackers.

The only other notable change is that Bianka now arrests Carl instead of Mutsumi. I did this for a few reasons. The first was so that Mutsumi could accompany Serika to make sure she's safe, and the second was to show that Bianka's back in the game. She might still be bald, but at least her hair will grow back.

Speaking of bald, I will confirm that in the next chapter, someone WILL end up completely bald. The next chapter will also be the climax of the Ides of March arc so I hope you look forward to it.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

Escape:Witch [Remake]

Chapter:18

May 07, 2024

Author's Commentary #74:

Time to talk about Chapter 74: Whiplash.
This marks the beginning of the pain. The arc is only going to get darker and more tragic as things progress. There will also be more of a focus on Mimoko, though the others will have their moments as well.

One other thing I'll mention is that Maestro Himitsu's rating has finally been revealed and it's 3200. This is because the maximum level for the chess.com bot is rated 3200. The Ultima-master is also rated 3200, yet it seems unlikely that Maestro Himitsu and the Ultima-master are one in the same.

One final thing I'll mention is that this arc is filled with mysteries. See if you can solve them all before the arc concludes.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

En Passant Grandmaster

Chapter:74

May 07, 2024

Author's Commentary #26:

Time to talk about Chapter 26: Talking things out with Matcha.
This chapter offers a glimpse into what Matcha's family is like. It also confirms that Purin and Mochi from Escape Witch are her sisters.

One other thing this chapter hints at is the major change regarding Hinari from the original. The Madagascar incident was also present in the original story, however, Hinari was not present in it. I'll talk more about that once the Madagascar incident is covered in the story.

One final thing I'll mention is that Rika's older sisters, Nino and Ichika, are a reference to Ichika and Nino from Quintessential Quintuplets. With their introduction, this means that 3 of the 5 quints have been referenced, and I can confirm that more characters will appear that share their names with characters from Quintessential Quintuplets. Though intriguingly enough, I have yet to add a character named Yotsuba or Fuutarou into any of my works.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

Spice of life [Remake]

Chapter:26

May 06, 2024

Author's Commentary #25:

Time to talk about Chapter 25: Benihime's motivation.
Finally, some more insight has been given into Benihime's character. Originally, I had an entire story arc planned around her, but it never came to fruition in the original. The remake however will include the arc, but it won't be until well into Season 2 when it starts. Now let's talk more about Benihime.

白姫紅姫 (Shirohime Benihime) is how her name is spelled in kanji. Her first name, 紅姫, means "crimson" and "noblewoman" while 白姫 means "white" and "princess". A large inspiration for her character was Constance von Nuvelle from Fire Emblem Three houses.

Her birthday is June 21st, which is national wagyu day. This is fitting since wagyu is her favorite meal.

Now Zuina is the only Ryokoma staff member shrouded in mystery. While I won't divulge much on her backstory, I will give some basic facts regarding her.

Her full name is Zuina Morsten Adler and she was born to a British father and Japanese mother.
ズイナ・モーステン・アドラー (Zuina Morsten Adler) is how her full name would be spelled in Japanese. She actually was given a name with kanji by her mother and chose to adopt that name once she moved from England to Japan with her sister.
アドラー瑞菜 (Adler Zuina) is how her name is spelled with her first name in kanji. 瑞菜 means "fortune" and "vegetable" which is fitting since she was raised on a British farm.
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me.

Her birthday is October 25th which is national pasta day. However, her favorite food is breadsticks, mainly due to how simplistic they are. National breadstick day is a thing, however, the date is always on the last Friday of October. Since National breadstick day falls on October 25th this year, I decided to make the date Zuina's birthday. Not to mention, breadsticks also go great with pasta.

One other thing I'll mention about Zuina is that she largely adheres to an octo-lavo vegetarian diet. The only meat she eats is from bivalves, mainly because she doesn't really feel guilty about eating them and considers them to be edible seashells. Thus, she could be considered more of a pescetarian. Despite her diet though, she has no issue with people that eat meat or cooking meat-based meals. While she hasn't had much of a role in the story thus far, I promise she will once the next major arc rolls around.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

Spice of life [Remake]

Chapter:25

May 06, 2024

Author's Commentary #73:

Time to talk about Chapter 73: The fallen maestro.
The title drop has finally happened! Not to mention, both Maestro Himitsu and Maestro Xiao Lin have fallen. Obviously, naming the saga "The fallen maestros" would have been a bit spoilery, but nonetheless, two of the 7 maestros have fallen.
Xiao Lin fell to the dark side the moment she decided to agree to Ai's plan, but her throwing a high-stakes game in order to proceed with the malicious plan truly goes to show how far she has fallen. While she is now completely hairless for the rest of her life as punishment for losing the match, she could care less, and will only fall further now that she's going to join the Desperado league and get a DESPER.

One final thing I'll talk about is the Ultima-master. This marks the first proper appearance of the Ultima-master in the story, however, it is not fully shown. All that is shown of it is it's glowing red eye.

Speaking of which, if you look closely at the O in all iterations of the Desperado league collage art, you'll notice the O is actually a glowing red eye. In other words, the Ultima-master has been in the artwork this whole time.

Since the artwork has been updated to cover everything up to the end of Season 2 Part 1, I'll explain the meaning behind the updated portraits. Nyoan's is obvious as she's now bald and wearing a wool-knit hat to cover her head and ears. Kazuya's represents the school roof which was where the big battle against him took place. Finally, Tsar Grigori gets full artwork like Peter to symbolize that like Peter, he's a league member without a DESPER. However, since he makes use of Svetlana, who does have a DESPER, and has sinister ambitions, he stands on the opposite side of Peter.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

En Passant Grandmaster

Chapter:73

May 06, 2024

Author's Commentary #17:

Time to talk about Chapter 17: Ides of March Part 2.
Whelp, things just went from bad to worse. Now Serika and Emeri have both been kidnapped. Serika's also on the verge of drowning while Emeri's already lost all her fingernails on her left hand. The only hope is for Madoka to save everyone.

Now before I talk about some behind the scenes trivia regarding this chapter, I first want to bring attention to the cover art of the novel. As stated in the description for the image, each picture is a reference to a scene in the story. Yuni and Madoka are referencing the unbeatable escape room arc, Emeri is referencing Jester's explosive crepe factory, and Serika is referencing the Ides of March arc. Now for some interesting trivia regarding the initial drafts for this arc.

As I mentioned in previous commentaries, this arc was originally going to be Emeri's debut. As such, she would end up getting kidnapped by the goons at a convenience store and taken to the hotel. Serika still would have got kidnapped, but instead of encountering Emeri on her way to work, she'd have encountered Madoka.

Madoka and Serika would argue with each other until Madoka would notice Emeri tied up in a car passing by. Serika would then chase after it and get kidnapped, while Madoka hid in an alley. Then Madoka would simply follow the goons to the hotel.

Once I decided that Emeri would be introduced earlier in the story, I then had to find some way to keep Madoka out of the picture for a bit. And as shown in the story, the idea I came up with was having her be arrested and confined in a maximum security holding cell. This was why she ended up kicking Mochi in the face as that would give the police grounds to arrest her. Funnily enough, I actually had a maximum holding cell escape arc planned in the outlining phase of the story, but the full arc never came to fruition. I did salvage the idea though as shown in the story.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

Escape:Witch [Remake]

Chapter:17

May 05, 2024

Author's Commentary #72:

Time to talk about Chapter 72: The first domino.
Ai has begun to make her move, and to make matters worse, Maestro Xiao Lin seems to be on board as well as Michiko. For now, let's talk about the twins, Tenju and Taira Kuroshiro.

黒代白羽 (Kuroshiro Tenju) is how Tenju's name is spelled in kanji, while 黒代黛羅 (Kuroshiro Taira) is how Taira's name is spelled in kanji. 白羽 means "white" and "feather", while 黛羅 means "black veil" and "net". The twin's surname, 黒代, means "black" and "substitute". As you can tell, the twins are based off the theme of black and white. Taira tends to favor the color black, while Tenju the color white. Her hair is naturally black, however she dyed it white.
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).

Their birthday is January 24th. I chose this day because it was apparently regarded as the most depressing day of the year. The twins have a very harsh backstory. All I'll reveal for now about it is that both were born prematurely and were abandoned by their birth mother. Many believed Taira in particular wouldn't make it, and the twin's mother even requested Taira be euthanized, however, despite being just a premature newborn, Tenju protected her sister as best she could. Luckily, the doctors refused to go along with the twin's mother's request and did all they could to keep the twins alive.

This incident is what originally led Tenju to develop a sister complex as she felt she was the only one that could stand by Taira's side since everyone else seemed to shun her. As for why Taira was shunned, that will be revealed later in the story.

Tenju's favorite piece is the rook, mainly because she views them as essential companions to the king, and compares the relationship to her and Taira.

Taira's favorite piece is also the rook, however, she likes them mainly for the fact that they tend to be an essential piece in the endgame.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

En Passant Grandmaster

Chapter:72

May 05, 2024

I'd read an entire spinoff focused on nothing but these crazy wrestling matches.

Bound by Fate: The Elf's Embrace

Chapter:18

May 05, 2024

Definitely did not expect a WWE match between a cat and a racoon, but glad it happened.

Bound by Fate: The Elf's Embrace

Chapter:17

May 05, 2024

Author's Commentary #24:

Time to talk about Chapter 24: Rika's biggest fear.
Rika's past has finally caught up with her. Her father, Yuugen is one of the most coldblooded and ambitious assassins in the world. He's also strong to boot and can beat Rika with ease. In fact, let's talk about him some more.

ころせかい結玄 (Korosekai Yuugen) is how his name is spelled in Japanese. His first name, 結玄, means "to finish" and "dark".
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).

His birthday is October 31st, which is also Halloween.

His favorite food is poison. He boasts a a high poison resistance and can tolerate any dish that has been laced with poison. He can still get an upset stomach, however, if he ingests a meal of nothing but large quantities of pure poison.

Now that Rika's family has entered the story, they'll serve as some of the main antagonists for the 1st season of the remake. This also marks a turning point in the story as now Itsuki has ran away in fear after learning the truth of Rika's past. To make matters worse, Yuugen has a plan cooking to try and bring Rika back to the mansion. The story is about to get crazy. I hope you look forward to it.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

Spice of life [Remake]

Chapter:24

May 05, 2024

Author's Commentary #16:

Time to talk about Chapter 16: Ides of March Part 1.
If you thought the cliffhanger at the end of the last chapter was bad, this one is even worse. Now Yuni's down her eyebrows and her hair and mind are in terrible shape. Yuni only managed to regain her strength and mount a counterattack thanks to remembering her mother, Fubuki, but even that wasn't enough.

You might have noticed that time went by rather quickly this chapter. That is because this arc will feature events taking place simultaneously from one another. This chapter focused solely on Yuni, while the next chapter will focus on Emeri.

Originally, this arc was much less dark, but still saw Yuni getting kidnapped by Fujiko and dragged to the salon. Back then, she was simply going to be chloroformed upon returning home, and wake up in the salon. To make matters worse for Yuni, Kurobane was even going to mandate she go to the salon to have Fujiko shave all her hair off as a sign of repentance for Bianka attacking Fujiko. To give some context, Bianka was originally going to come to the museum with Yuni and co, and leave to go after Fujiko. Mochi then would have blamed Yuni for giving the "order" to Bianka to leave, which would cause Kurobane to ultimately blame her for the incident and order her to get a makeover from Fujiko as punishment.

One final thing I'll talk about is what Fujiko's theme song would be. It would likely be a menacing and slowed-down remix of Rossini's The Barber of Seville Overture. As for why, first I like classical music, second, I feel a menacing remix of Barber of Seville would fit Fujiko's character well considering she's an evil hair stylist. Perhaps the track would even be titled something like "Bald fetishist of Seville". However, if this novel ever were to get an anime adaptation, there would be a scene where the original Barber of Seville overture would be used as a soundtrack. As for what that scene is, I'll reveal that once it appears in the story.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

Escape:Witch [Remake]

Chapter:16

May 04, 2024

Author's Commentary #23:

Time to talk about Chapter 23: A conspiracy in the shadows.
There is a lot to discuss in this chapter. We'll start off by discussing the officers from the raiding force.

As mentioned in the previous commentary, Makoto, Inoka, Purin, and Yumeko are all from Escape Witch. Since Spice of life chronologically takes place 7 years before Escape Witch, this will offer some glimpses at how some of these characters were before Escape Witch. Most notably though is the fact that Makoto's surname is not yet Kurobane, and the fact that Yumeko has a different hairstyle. Inoka, aka Kaori, is also just as kooky as ever. As for Purin, I'll talk about her more when she reappears in the story.

Now onto Izuhana, the bounty hunter duo made up of Izumi Izuki and Hanabi Natsumi. In the original, Hanabi had yet to meet Izumi when she appeared at the banquet, but for the remake, I decided to have the two already be a team when they debuted, mainly because the story just flowed better that way.

Originally, the two were going to be Escape Witch characters, but after I struggled with trying to give them a definitive role in that story, I relegated them to just having a cameo. Here however, the duo has a much larger stage to shine on.

夏見花日 (Natsumi Hanabi) is how Hanabi's name is written in kanji. Her first name, 花日, means "flower" and "sun", while 夏見 means "Summer" and "to see".

泉貴和 (Izuki Izumi) is how Izumi's name would be written in kanji. Her first name, 和, means "harmony" while 泉貴 means "fountain" and "valuable".
(If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me.)

I don't want to reveal what their favorite meals are just yet, so instead I'll discuss a bit more on the inspiration behind the duo. Both are based off of characters from Akuma no Riddle with Hanabi being based off of Haruki Sagae and Izumi being based off of Isuke Inukai. The reason for this was simply because I was watching Akuma no Riddle around the time I began doing drafts for Escape Witch, so it was fresh in my mind.

Izumi's birthday is June 29th, which she shares with Isuke Inukai from Akuma no Riddle.

Hanabi's birthday is December 24th which she shares with Haruki Sagae from Akuma no Riddle. The date is also Christmas eve.

As for the ending of the chapter, all I'll say is that it showcases how corrupt Makoto and Yumeko are.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

Spice of life [Remake]

Chapter:23

May 04, 2024

Author's Commentary #71:

Time to talk about Chapter 71: Japan's beautiful SPCMs.
Yeah, this is a fanservice chapter, plain and simple. Since events in the story are going to move by quickly, at least in terms of the in-universe time-frame, I felt it would be best to have a lighthearted fanservice chapter mainly to give some more personality to the SPCMs and properly introduce the remaining ones.

I will confirm that this was the chapter I alluded to back in my commentary for Chapter 69. I was debating shifting things around, however, I didn't want to spoil the surprise that all the women that were hanging out in the Triple cedar secret puzzle cafe were SPCMs. Thus, I decided not to make this chapter, Chapter 69. Well, at least it was a nice lighthearted ecchi chapter.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

En Passant Grandmaster

Chapter:71

May 04, 2024

Author's Commentary #15:

Time to talk about Chapter 15: Beware the Ides of March.
This is the prelude to the 3rd major arc of the series, The Ides of March arc. Funnily enough, the idea for this arc came about simply because I though "Ides of March" would make for an epic arc title. As such, this also impacted the time period the story took place as I wanted the Ides of March arc to take place on the Ides of March in universe.

Originally, the story was going to start on March 13th instead of the 12th, but after I decided to introduce Emeri earlier, I decided to move the start date of the story to the 12th so I could fit the Unbeatable escape room arc, Emeri's introduction, and the Museum of mummies arc in before Ides of March.

Speaking of Emeri, this was originally going to be where she'd be introduced to the story. The original idea was that Mochi would surrender her phone voluntarily, however, the station's resident hacker would have been unable to recover the video. Madoka then would have taken Yuni to Emeri's place where Emeri would have been introduced as Rolly Polly.

Originally, Emeri's introduction would have seen her disguising herself with layers of clothes to the point that at a glance, people would assume she's a fat man. Madoka would have still known Emeri prior, but wouldn't know that Emeri was a hacker, nor that she was actually Rolly Polly. All she would have known was that Emeri had great respect for the hacker named "Rolly Polly".

Once the video had been recovered, Emeri would then shed her disguise and ride to the station on her motorcycle, where she'd get kidnapped after stopping by a convenience store.

As for Yuni and Fujiko, Fujiko actually would have stalked Yuni all the way to Emeri's place and then headed to Yuni's place to lie in wait until revealing herself at midnight. I'll discuss more about the initial drafts for this arc as the arc progresses. For now, let's go back to some points I mentioned last commentary, namely why I felt the need to build up Fujiko as an irredeemable terror.

First off, I wanted to establish Fujiko as a terrifying villain so that it makes the moment where she arrives at Yuni's apartment all the more suspenseful. Second, the incident with Bianka also shined some light on Serika and offered a glimpse into her character. All I'll say is that Serika will also play a major role in this arc.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

Escape:Witch [Remake]

Chapter:15

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