Mario Nakano 64

Mario Nakano 64

It's a me. I'm an aspiring light novel writer hoping to one day see my works in anime form. I hope that my works at least brighten up your day and give you something to look forward to.

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    Mar 29, 2025

    I have to agree with Cashew Cocoa. While I understand why Japanese is present in the story, it really does break the immersion at times. I feel it stems from the fact that we assume that while the language of the novel is English, the characters themselves are speaking Japanese. Another reason I feel this might be the case is due to the transliteration. I'm not sure if this is true for most, but I tend not to like it when transliterated text from a language that doesn't use the Latin alphabet is displayed in text. In one of my works, there are characters from various countries present, who will often times default to speaking their native tongues. If they start speaking in their native tongue and said language uses the Cyrillic alphabet, I'll always use said alphabet rather than transliterations. While I feel typing the sentences in actual Japanese would be a good way to try and keep the immersion, I realize the contest rules might not permit that.

    Thus, I can't really offer much of a solution, other than reworking things. Like maybe, for the segments where Sakuya speaks Japanese, it's olde Japanese instead of modern Japanese. But even then, I feel the main issue with Japanese and the immersion factor lies with the transliterated Japanese. A word or phrase is fine, but 3 paragraphs is a lot. My final suggestion would thus be italicizing the transliterated Japanese, as that way, it stands out more that these words are being spoken. I often use italics in my works when denoting whether a character is either speaking English and/or singing. I feel that doing so is a good way to at least denote the spoken language of the text, and hopefully retain the immersion.

    Anyway, apologies for the paragraphs, but I just felt I'd offer some advice on how to possibly handle the immersion issue. As for the chapter, I'm glad Sakuya actually decided to just rip the spirit out. Sure it's not goody two-shoes, but I tend not to like those types of characters at times. It also has the potential to be a good plot element and come back to bite Sakuya later.

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    Black & White: Spirits, Love, and Traditions
    Chapter:7




    Mar 28, 2025

    Author's Commentary #392:

    Time to talk about Chapter 392: Mother-daughter heart-to-heart.
    One thing that's actually been bothering me for a long time in regards to the story is Daria's coldness towards Mimoko back at the end of Season 3 when she is first revealed to be maestro Himitsu. I know exactly why I did it, that being to setup Okisato's epic clash with her, but it's still bothered me. This chapter seeks to rectify that by giving some more insight into Daria's current psych at the time and why she acted the way she did. I feel some will still criticize Daria's attitude back then even after this chapter, but that's fine. I at least am now satisfied.

    And before we move onto the next main topic of discussion, friendly reminder that Daria is 100% pregnant. She's still not at the point where it becomes physically obvious, but that will likely change following the tournament.

    As for the next main topic of discussion, Carla has returned. I've been meaning to do a follow-up chapter with her for a while now, and finally given a good chance to do so in the story, took the opportunity. Thanks to this meeting with Mimoko, Carla is now likely to not only have a good relationship with chess for the rest of her life, but also likely to become the sole DSPCM of San Marino. And to invoke the "If this ever gets a video game adaptation" mentality, following completion of Season 7 in the game, Carla would be unlocked as a DSPCM and CPU opponent alongside a side story centering around her, just like what nearly all of the DSPCMs and SPCMs would have.

    And now, just one chapter remains until round 7 begins, but that doesn't mean this next chapter won't be entertaining. At least one old face that hasn't been seen in the story for a while will return. See if you can guess who it is before it's revealed in the story.

    That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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    Chapter:392

    Mar 27, 2025

    Author's Commentary #391:

    Time to talk about Chapter 391: Iori and Mimoko.
    Originally, this chapter was not even on the radar, ore even planned, but since I wanted to feature a chapter focusing on Okisato and Iori during the rest day, I ended up coming up with this, and I'm very glad I did.

    I'm sure many are curious as to how Iori got into chess, and now the answer is known. Not to mention, her friendship with Mimoko as well. For the game, I wanted it to be short, but also symbolic, which is why I ended up going for a king mate. Not only does Iori consider the king "lame", but Mimoko considers it the core of the game, making things all the more symbolic. Had Iori not been mated in such dramatic fashion, she probably wouldn't have taken much interest in chess, but thanks to that flashy mate, she was inspired, and is now an international master, knocking on the door of becoming a grandmaster.

    To be honest, this game is one of the most important in the series despite it's debut in the 391st chapter. Both Iori and Mimoko's friendship and Iori's first exposure to chess are topics I've felt the need to touch on for a while, so I'm glad that after so long, this chapter has done just that. And the crazy thing is I literally thought this all up and wrote it less than a week before it was uploaded.

    As for the story, things will now shift over to Daria and Mimoko, who will be getting a nice heart-to-heart moment themselves along with some more character development. After that, just one chapter remains before round 7 will finally begin. I hope you're looking forward to it.

    That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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    Chapter:391





    Mar 26, 2025

    Author's Commentary #389:

    Time to talk about Chapter 389: Rumor mill roundup with Fifi and Filipa.
    It's the grand finale of Kisha's show, so naturally it's going to end with an epic chess game. And epic it truly was. With 31 moves, this game delivered as Fifi showcased why she's an international master. Though she is still far away from beating the allegations that she's also Filipa.

    One thing of note about this chapter is that originally, it was split into two, that being the main rumor portion and the game portion. However, I decided to combine the chapters instead as things flowed better that way. Speaking of the rumors though, one notable name that came up was Le Mime, the SPCM of France that was mentioned a few chapters back. I said a few commentaries ago I'd hold off on doing his bio until more info was revealed about him, and since it just was, let's jump right into it.

    レー・マイム (Le Mime) is how Le Mime's name would be spelled in katakana.

    His birthday is March 22nd, which is World Mime Day.

    His favorite piece is the pawn.

    Nobody knows Le Mime's true identity, which is why there's so much mystery surrounding him. Some think he's a woman, a disgraced politician, a homeless man, or even an alien. I imagine his identity will become one of the series' long-stay mysteries.

    Speaking of which, many other mysteries were hinted at in this chapter. If this ever got a video game adaptation, you can bet you the player would be able to check out each and every one of these rumors in your free time. But if there's one I'd like to highlight, it's the Mexican team. I've had a plan for them for a while, but just haven't gotten the opportunity to explore their story yet. Though if you check out the artwork of them, particularly their names, you might get an idea on what their theme will be. Best of all, there's a good chance that following round 7, they'll make their proper debut in the story.

    That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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    Chapter:389

    Mar 26, 2025

    Author's Commentary #388:

    Time to talk about Chapter 388: Tons of twins and triplets too.
    Originally, this chapter was just meant to highlight all the sets of twins and triplets competing in the tournament. It still does that, but now what was once a 600-word chapter is now nearly 2300 word long. It's definitely thanks to the appearance of the Greek and Turkish teams at the end, along with the game that was played. But before we talk about that, we have a lot of bios to do since I was unable to do any in the previous commentary.

    テウタ・カヤ (Teuta Kaja) is how Teuta's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Her birthday is April 9th, which is Constitution Day in Kosovo.

    Her favorite piece is the queen.

    Teuta is the president of Kosovo as well as a Desperado. While she normally has a quiet disposition, she is one of the nation's biggest nationalists, seeking nothing short of Kosovo's sovereignty to be recognized by all and Serbia to be punished for all it's done to it, notably during the Kosovo war. While her goal of getting Kosovo's sovereignty to be recognized is a noble one, she goes about doing so in morally questionable ways. She is also racist towards Serbs and will often enact laws geared towards punishing Kosovo Serbs. She also gets along poorly with the leaders of Greece, Serbia, Romania, and Russia, all of whom being some of the biggest nations that refuse to acknowledge Kosovo's existence as an independent nation.

    アルブレナ・ウルキナク (Albulena Ulqinaku) is how Albulena's name would be written in katakana.

    シュプレサ・ウルキナク (Shpresa Ulqinaku) is how Shpresa's name would be spelled in katakana.

    ルルジェタ・ウルキナク (luljeta Ulqinaku) is how Luljeta's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Their birthday is September 2nd, which is the day the Battle of Albulena took place.

    Their favorite piece is the queen.

    Unlike her sisters, Albulena is a hardcore nationalist, which will immediately make her one of the more controversial characters in the series. Her sisters are patriotic, but they aren't crazy like her, and instead hope simply for peace with Serbia and for Kosovo's sovereignty to be acknowledged by the international community. Sadly, both Teuta's and Albulena's actions can complicate that. Shpresa is also Kosovo's sole DSPCM, being based in Pristina. Unlike Luljeta, she's far more willing to confront Albulena when she goes too far, often resulting in minor bloodshed between the two.

    ヴィオレッタ・ヒセンベリウ (Violeta Hysenbelliu) is how Violeta's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Her birthday is February 17th, which is Independence Day in Kosovo.

    Her favorite piece is the queen.

    While Violeta will claim she's a hardcore patriot, the reality is that she simply acts that way to avoid angering Teuta for whom she works for. In reality, she wishes to get along with her Serbian neighbors, but sadly, not only does Teuta complicate that, but some Serbians such as Nikolina and Đurađ, also don't want to get along with Kosovar and Albanians. It really is agonizing for poor Violeta, especially since she often has no one to confide with. Shpresa would be her best option, but she fears that Albulena might catch wind of things if she approached her, thus, she chooses to fight her battle alone.

    アイオナ・ユーイング (Iona Ewing) is how Iona's name would be spelled in katakana.

    ローナ・ユーイング (Lorna Ewing) is how Lorna's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Their birthday is June 24th. The reason behind this is that the coordinate for the island of Iona are 56°19′48″N 06°24′36″W.

    Their favorite piece is the knight.

    ブリタニー・マクドナルド (Brittany McDonald) is how Brittany's name would be spelled in katakana.

    ブリジット・マクドナルド (Bridget McDonald) is how Bridget's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Their birthday is April 15th, which is the day the McDonald's corporation was founded.

    Their favorite piece is the queen.

    フィオン・グラス (Ffion Glas) is how Ffion's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Her birthday is September 5th. I chose this date at random, so there's no greater significance behind why this date is her birthday.

    Her favorite piece is the queen.

    リ・バン・グラス (Lí Ban Glas) is how Lí Ban's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Her birthday is October 15th, which is the day the first episode of the Lí Ban animated series aired.

    Her favorite piece is the queen.

    Out of all of Sorcha's wives, Lí Ban is by far her favorite, and the one who loves her back the most. As such, she gave Sorcha full reign to unleash her fetish upon her, though she herself was also down for going bald and inking every inch of her skin with tattoos.

    ヌーラ・グラス (Nuala Glas) is how Nuala's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Her birthday is July 12th, which is Orangemens' Day.

    Her favorite piece is the queen.

    シオフラ・グラス (Síofra Glas) is how Síofra's name would be spelled in katakana.

    オノラ・ダフィー (Onóra Daffey) is how Onóra's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Their birthday is March 17th, which is St. Patrick's Day.

    Their favorite piece is the bishop.

    Unlike the other twins and triplets, Síofra and Onóra each represent different nations. This largely stems from Onóra traveling abroad to study art, but another reason Onóra left was because she didn't like Heather's rule of the UK. Síofra on the other hand, fell in love with Sorcha and ended up marrying her and thus joining her green battalion of the Fairy league. She's also the sole DSPCM of Northern Ireland, being based in it's capitol of Belfast.

    Ffion originally hails from Wales, but was seduced by Sorcha and joined her harem. As such, she now just as bald as her thanks to Sorcha insisting all her wives go bald like her.

    ナラン・バシャク (Nalan Başak) is how Nalan's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Her birthday is October 14th, which she shares with her older twin sister, Muazzez.

    Her favorite piece is the knight.

    Originally, I was planning to shed a bit more light on why Nalan hates Muazzez so much, but instead opted to take the chapter in a different direction as going more in depth on it would drastically alter the tone of the chapter which I didn't want. The topic will be brought up in the future though.

    エレンダズ・オズビレン (Erendiz Özbilen) is how Erendiz's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Her birthday is April 21st. I chose this date at random, so there's no greater significance behind why this date is her birthday.

    Her favorite piece is the bishop.

    Erendiz is a woman who once sought to be a trailblazer only to later become a bootlicker to better her own standing. As shown in the chapter, she's incredibly vain, still considering herself to be the pinnacle of femininity and a symbol to women everywhere. And if you wanted another reason to hate her, she's homophobic as well.

    カドリエ・エルコチ (Kadriye Erkoç) is how Kadriye's name would be spelled in katakana.

    Her birthday is June 3rd, which she shares with Turkish grandmaster, Yağız Kaan Erdoğmuş.

    Her favorite piece is the bishop.

    アテナ・キシロウリス (Athena Xylouris) is how Athena's name would be written in katakana. Αθηνά Ξυλούρη (Athena Xylouris) is how it would be written in Greek.

    Her birthday is March 24th, which she shares with Greek international master, Stavroula Tsolakidou.

    Her favorite piece is the queen.

    Sharing her name with the Greek goddess of wisdom, Athena herself is a highly intelligent woman as showcased by her 2777 rating. She is the leader of Greece as well as a Desperado like the other Balkan nation leaders.

    エウリュアレ・インディコ (Euryale Indikó) is how Eurale's name would be spelled in katakana. Εὐρυάλη Ινδικό (Euryale Indikó) is how it would be spelled in Greek.

    ステノ・インディコ (Stheno Indikó) is how Stheno's name would be spelled in katakana. Σθενώ Ινδικό (Stheno Indikó) is how it would be spelled in Greek.

    Their birthday is July 16th, which is World Snake Day.

    Their favorite piece is the bishop.

    These two are Medeucesa's older sisters. They also have a tendency to be sibilant in their speech.

    ダフネ・ヴァカロプロス (Daphne Vakalopoulos) is how Daphne's name would be spelled in katakana. Δάφνη Βακαλοπούλου (Daphne Vakalopoulos) is how it would be spelled in Greek.
    (If I made any mistakes with the translations, feel free to correct me).

    Her birthday is September 13th, which is the day Daphne Blake from the Scooby-Doo series made her debut appearance.

    Her favorite piece is the queen.

    Phew, that was a lot. As for the game, I wanted something really short, and opted to go for one of the fastest ways to achieve an en passant checkmate. To achieve this particular mate, Athena needed to place her queen in danger by capturing a pawn. Had Erendiz caught on, Athena would have lost her queen. However, Athena still would have likely won the game even down a queen.

    And with that, we're through this chapter and onto the final segment of Kisha's show before the pairings are revealed. All I'll say is that there will be a game next chapter, and it will be epic.

    That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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    Chapter:388