Oct 05, 2017
I get the feeling I've seen this plot before (it isn't necessarily a bad thing, you just need to be careful you don't make it too cliched), but there's undoubtedly an ecchi twist to it, given you really seem to like throwing the idea of "the king is a girl, the king has panties" in there (you've done that for this one and ch. 3). Don't recycle similar cliffhangers too many times or else it'll lose impact on your audience.
I'm not entirely great with the idea of all magics turning kings into douchebags unless it's an effect of the magic - after all, magic does what a user wants to do with it, which isn't necessarily "good" or "bad" all the time. That might just be my view though - if Kris/the narrator views the world that way, you can leave it.
Like Jio mentions with ch. 3, "good looking" is subjective. What colour are Sylvia's eyes anyway?
There's some odd formatting (such as the line that mentions the class murmuring about what the new king would be like), although I don't know whether that's a copy-paste error or how you've spaced things out. There's also a random hyphen in one of the lines (before "eyes").
