Aug 20, 2023
Tamako feels like the MC of Persona 5 with his night and day differences, lol.
As others have said, the writing feels more like a summary. Much of it is all the telling instead of showing. Things happen pretty sequentially like you're listing plot points. Honestly, I'm not even sure you need all the backstory of how they met in the first chapter because it seems like your real hook is the twist at the end.
