Mar 30, 2020
I like the dialogue-heavy style you use. It's what I use, so I like it. I also like how you formatted spirit wave, since action moves are always cool. Your grammar isn't perfect, but you can always edit it later. It doesn't detract very much from the comprehensibility of the story. If you want to improve your grammar though, you should find someone to comb through your writing for mistakes. Since making a mistake unconsciously a thousand times will just teach you to keep making that same mistake, yeah?