Aug 27, 2023
My dude really just burned the bridges of his friendship in a single chapter. And in the first one at that!
It's an interesting choice to depict him as a jerk who has a negative opinion of women and using the Pandora's box story to show that he released something he can't put back, which are his negative opinions of the student council. So far, this seems like a setup for a redemption story, but what the President said about the consequences of Kuro leaving has me wondering what's going to happen. Especially that voice he heard. Could it be what's she's referring to?
Good work on the chapter, loved what you did here! Sometimes I felt like it got a little confusing as to who was speaking, perhaps because of the lack of the word said being used or the very limited use of descriptions of what they are doing physically. Will come back for more later!
By the way, I noticed your novel is not marked as complete. Make sure to do that before the contest ends, or it will be disqualified!