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K-J-Whitten

Explorer of fantasy. Daydreamer. Protector of waifus. But most of all, I’m a writer! My name is K. J. Whitten. Though some readers call me KJ. Each story is a part of myself that I give to you.

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Sep 22, 2021

Hmm, she's going to be a difficult person to deal with. Considering that our MCs want to create a more favorable opinion of witches and gain allies toward that goal. I wonder how Snazzy and her will interact.

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:20

Sep 21, 2021

Welp, Evan messed up. Its going to be challenging to get out of this one. That part with Eveline saying to not look down on her was great. Looking forward to how this will all unfold next!

The Consequence of Saving the World

Chapter:17

Sep 21, 2021

Interesting twist! I didn't expect him to turn into a dragon. I wonder how Aurelia is going to react to this news.

Anyways, I wanted to let you know that I found a mistake in the chapter. You have a word repeated a second time in this sentence: "Phos had never never experienced such a phenomenon before..."

DRAGON’S FLIGHT

Chapter:18

Sep 19, 2021

Yep, Snazzy is going to show them whose boss. Or whose the jellyfish of culture. Probably both. Good chapter once again!

By the way, found a mistake while I was reading. It was this sentence: "Needing to keep him mind out of the gutter, Snazzy made small talk with each of his patients." should say, his mind instead of him mind.

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:19

Sep 19, 2021

You have a mistake here where it says: "Melyeze grabbed a spare wooden sword from behind the tree and tossed it to my feet." It should say Eveline's name instead of Melyeze's name.

The Consequence of Saving the World

Chapter:16

Sep 19, 2021

To:Deleted User

Ok, thank you! 🙂

Do you dream of me in the next life?

Chapter:2

Sep 19, 2021

To:Deleted User

First of all, thank you for reading chapter 2!

Now about your feedback...yeah, maybe it does sound too adult. Most readers I've had in the past never took issue with it, so I've kept it this way ever since I first wrote it. Even though I have gotten at least a couple comments in the past taking issue with the hero bit of Joseph's dialogue...you are the first person to criticize Kalah's child dialogue. Could you please point out what specifically has the most problems in your opinion?

Children are smarter than we give them credit for and they can pick up words from adults (for better or worse lol). But I will look over it and see what I can do. At least to make it somewhat similar to what the dialogue serves for the story.

Do you dream of me in the next life?

Chapter:2

Sep 18, 2021

To:Deleted User

Thank you for reading the first chapter and adding my book to your library! Will check out your book later. 🙂

Do you dream of me in the next life?

Chapter:1

Sep 17, 2021

A shorter chapter from the usual, yet effective at making you feel that knee jerk reaction. Finally we meet the infamous shadow lord and he wants knowledge about their world - Aystaria's world. Not sure why he wants it other than chalking it up to "take over the world" but there might be more to it than that, as it could be a completely different reason.

Looking forward to how Emyria is going to react to all this and what happens next!

Six

Chapter:10

Sep 17, 2021

We learn more about the special abilities of flowers, more about Runo, and have ourselves a nice bonding moment between Dolly and Runo. Then that ending happened. The ending! Nicely done.

Anyways, just want to point out real quick something I think should be looked over. You have a sentence that says: "The statement that struck the man with lightning.", should say, "That statement struck the man with lightning."

Will be back for more! Though I wonder how Runo is going to react to this.

REALM ASSASSIN

Chapter:12

Sep 17, 2021

Whew boy, things are getting tense! Some kind of power must be resonating within Phos, which means the next chapter will be epic.

I wonder what the dragon means when they call Lilia a dragon? Maybe what happened with Aurelia meant he's part dragon or perhaps a descendant. 🤔
Either way, looking forward to reading what happens next!

DRAGON’S FLIGHT

Chapter:17

Sep 16, 2021

Hmm, the next chapters will be interesting to read. Especially for what gave him his white hair. So Ordis was not always a golem? I wonder what he was like before.

Nice moment between Sereya and Evan! <3

The Consequence of Saving the World

Chapter:15

Sep 16, 2021

Poor Snazzy. Our jellyfish of culture is going to be very tired by the end of this lol.

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:18

Sep 10, 2021

Grimoire of Lies let's go! Being that we haven't seen much of its capabilities, it will be interesting to see what it can do in combat.

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:17

Sep 10, 2021

Got to love our dude Phos!

So, this story is going to have Phos and Aurelia find the egg? Hmm. Many things can go wrong with a plotpoint like this. Yet I have to say I'm interested in seeing where this goes!

Anyways, I found a mistake when I was reading. It was in this part here: "...but she feel he had settled down and begun to relax." It should say felt, not feel.

DRAGON’S FLIGHT

Chapter:15

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