Sep 01, 2022
I was thinking of saying she is best girl material. That is until she said and did those things to him. Oof. Makes me wonder if these beliefs of hers is coming from past experience with humans or if it's a racist bias she picked up from her family or friends.
Whatever the case, hopefully Ash will find other friends who will be more accepting. And who knows, maybe Lissandra will change her opinion the more she gets to see and interact with Ash.
I know its too late to say my criticisim since the contest ended, but I felt a little bit of whiplash switching between Lissandra and Ash's point of view. Another thing I wanted to mention is your use of the word else, felt like a weird word choice sometimes.
Other than that, enjoyable chapter! Looking forward to reading more. :)